Mohammad Akmal Nazir

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An Advice - Poem by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

Teasing and calling one names
These are the dirtiest games
Picking holes in one's deeds
One sows the evil seeds
Being jealous and worried
What is there to be hurried?
Destiny works in its time
Before luck no dollar, no dime
The wheel of time never stops
To catch it man only hops
But never comes to his hand
And slips away like sand
So be more and more cosistent
Never let your soul on rent.


Comments about An Advice by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

  • (7/8/2011 10:11:00 AM)

    this is a really nice and meaningful poem. thanks for showing it to me. (Report)Reply

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  • Malaya Roses (7/7/2011 9:29:00 AM)

    I love to read this poem... it is very stylish in mocking the heat of envy & jealousy in human and how it could damage the person within... Such a good poem with a new way to say... hush the fool...! ! !
    Well done my friend...! ! !
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  • Indira Renganathan (7/7/2011 8:38:00 AM)

    Great advice....specially the last line is highly applaudable....10 (Report)Reply

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  • Edward Kofi Louis (7/7/2011 4:42:00 AM)

    A very nice piece of work. Thanks for sharing it with us.

    E.K.L.
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  • (7/7/2011 12:10:00 AM)

    Sound advice as we travel down life's highway, Dorian Grey sold his soul I would rather stick to your advice and enjoy life' reward, excellent words to follow+++++10 (Report)Reply

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  • Juan Olivarez (7/5/2011 6:53:00 PM)

    Good advice that everyone should heed. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/5/2011 4:45:00 PM)

    Put quite simply do not tamper with destiny, It gets the point across if my interpretation is correct
    a ten for content!
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  • (7/5/2011 3:15:00 PM)

    Hi, Akmal. I do agree that your advice is useful. But let me ask that if there is a particular reason you ask me to check out certain poems of your own, having just rated a particular one of mine-in this case one about the extinction of a species due to global warming, that in my opinion is due to a combination of the greed of big oil and our love of engines that ease our already easy lives (especially here in the US, where we obviously use way too much fuel for recreational needs and needless travel.) That 'polar bear' poem contained no advice, because the oil people care nothing about wildlife, only their profit margins. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/5/2011 8:13:00 AM)

    Life is beautiul why do you search for stones in curd? great piece of advice.Marks10 (Report)Reply

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  • (7/5/2011 4:26:00 AM)

    great descriptive write, flows very well.very punchy in style, a message, and a lesson, /10 (Report)Reply

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  • Mohammad Muzzammil (4/12/2011 9:22:00 AM)

    Very good poem that gives us advices to be successful in this world. One will get nothing before the time and more than one's fate. I like it. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, April 12, 2011

Poem Edited: Tuesday, July 5, 2011


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