An Everlasting Love Poem by Delicate Heart

Great sensitivity. A lovely read. Best regards, Trade.

A tender poem from a delicate heart...............Good Write..............

i liked the rhyme and the soft feelings associated with the poem good work should in the 6th line watches be watch

this is a great poem it has a sweet feeling to it

There's a lot more rhythm and simplicity to this one. I like it. You've improved with this poem. However, if you allow me to show you where you made a few slight errors. I think this is how it should be written: 'I gazed in wonder at the sky. Staring, thinking, saying why Does the space reflect her eyes? For the stars have many ties. Belong to her entity until she dies. What makes one watch the sky? 'Tis her love. For her I would die. Only to lie. In her sigh. Her love, it makes me but insane. Walking, running in the torrential rain. I guess her flames are like a fire. Brace my heart by a tight wire. Without her invigorating fuel. I am nothing more than a fool.' 'Cos' would be better as 'for'. In the 7th line, 'him' should be 'her', if you are still addressing the sky. Seeing as you've personified the sky as 'her', it would be a mistake to change it to a 'him.' The last line didn't make much sense, so I changed it to 'I am nothing more than a fool.' With time, your grammar will improve and your poetry will inevitably improve as well. I see promise in your work.

nicely penned loving lines...very emotive cheers

i like the way you presented love in a new light gives a lot to ponder on great poem

this is a great poem! it was written beautifully

see what love can do? ..it's a delicate feeling..grace

Indeed, we are all fools without love..........beautifuly written..