indira babbellapati

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An Experience, Surreal - Poem by indira babbellapati

my footprints on
path of ash followed me
into the womb of that
mysterious abode
before a perplexed gaze
there appeared two naked
ash-smeared bodies-
matted hair let loose
like directionless waves
they held a strident each
as if by a touch of magic
the two unified as one
lo, into a phallus of ash
occupying and expanding
into all the visible universe

i remained a witness to
my body, dissolving into
the ash bit by bit...

stupified in silence-echoing
and eternal-my 'other' stood
comatosed by the mystic environs

13may2009
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  • (11/15/2009 10:50:00 AM)

    a deep imagination! ! ! (Report)Reply

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  • (11/6/2009 8:52:00 AM)

    very intense....and overwhelming.
    a tremendous poem ma'am.
    hats off.
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  • (11/6/2009 3:51:00 AM)

    'Into a phallus of ash
    occupying and expanding
    into all the visible universe'

    Rachel Ann Butler
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  • (11/5/2009 4:33:00 AM)

    As always another wonderful imaginations with peotic excellence
    regards
    sandhya
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  • Sarwar Chowdhury (11/5/2009 4:01:00 AM)

    lo, into a phallus of ash
    occupying and expanding
    into all the visible universe

    Your excellency, this is excellent! :)
    10+
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  • Saadat Tahir (11/4/2009 3:35:00 AM)

    hey prof here get yer ten..
    and
    ummmm..welll
    i ll be gone

    ;))
    cheers
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  • Chandrashekar A Posy Poet (11/2/2009 10:41:00 PM)

    brilliant images..................... (Report)Reply

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  • (11/2/2009 4:44:00 AM)

    This also reminds me of a a weekend spent with Shiva devotees in the 1970's I have no idea why that weekend flashed in my mind as I read this. This is full of wonderous images of India and when I read your work I become strangly homesick I say strangly because India is not my homeland. It is my obsession I think.
    Love always Paddy--------10
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  • (11/1/2009 2:22:00 AM)

    I had this vision in the Devipuram Temple(The old temple on the hillock) when my eyes first laid upon that holy Phallus Idol of Lord Shiva.

    Now you brought that imagery right into my inner eye. Thank you.
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  • (11/1/2009 1:01:00 AM)

    stunning images.. fine fine stuff. (Report)Reply

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  • Sathyanarayana M V S (11/1/2009 1:00:00 AM)

    A poem to ponder over, again and again. True srrealism........Like graphics in movies (Report)Reply

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  • Sandra Martyres (10/31/2009 11:56:00 PM)

    Your bring out the surreal experience with terrific imagery Indira...You are the mistress of teh surreal. I remember reading another poem of yours written earlier on surrealism..which was equally evocative... (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 31, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 8, 2009


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