~an Obscene Scene~ Poem by E Nigma

~an Obscene Scene~

Rating: 5.0

Welcome to the scene
There's some stains from a loather
A twisted love conveyed
By what's drained on the covers

Passions at their peak on the prowl
Through the process
Glistening lips that whisper
To the captain of the cockpit

Taking off what is
As they reach their elevation
Mile high club swinging
To the beat of penetration

A bitter lovers quarrel clung
To the carry on baggage
She's got the perfect view
On the manifest, her advantage

The clueless comfort felt
Through the long forgotten distance
Seperation mere illusion
As you'll learn from this instance

The housekeepers keycard snatched
While she's distracted
The calm before a storms
Forceful interaction

Slowly the door opens
To lovers lost in their sounds
Drenched in sweat, cheek to cheek
3 Hearts pound aloud

Shaken to her roots she always knew
But now she knows, frozen she's cold
Her hatred boils in what flows, finally
She's letting go, her blade, his throat

Wednesday, November 5, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: Mystery
This is a story of a flight attendant with split personality disorder who believes her husband, who is the captain, is cheating on her.
Though this infidelity only takes place within her mind. The fact is that sometimes she sleeps with her husband and other times
It is her other personality that does.

She only remembers bits and pieces of what takes place and it's because of this that she becomes paranoid to the point that she starts becoming lost within her fantasies that are actually part reality but, because she can only recall bits and pieces
she starts filling in the gaps of her memories with paranoid delusions.

It's at this point she plans on catching her husband, confronting and then killing him in the act. So one night while they are being intimate she pulls a blade an puts it to his throat confronting him and telling him to explain himself she's so angry she starts pushing the blade deep into his throat cutting him and as the blood starts to flow along with him explaining to her about her condition she finally realizes that he is telling the truth and that there was never really another woman but her other personality that was sleeping with him and it was then at this point that she feels completely overwhelmed by the truth of this startling revelation and she finally starts to let everything go.
Chuy Amante 05 November 2014

Good thing you told the story. I thought for sure it was about my ex and her cold blade and my warm neck nice write! ! !

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Mihaela Pirjol 06 November 2014

This is an intense, powerful story with great use of metaphors, and vivid imagery pulsing at the primary human instincts: fear and passion. There is suspense and mystery in the last three stanzas till the end, till the last line. A really thought provoking poem!

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Valsa George 07 November 2014

Oh, my.....! Terror has struck my throat dry! What a ghastly scene you have drawn! Though this is pure imagination, I have heard of real incidents like this where paranoic partners have done similar things to their husbands/wives who were very possessive and who slowly developed a kind of obsessive suspicion about the fidelty of their spouse! It was so engaging from start to finish like reading a thriller story! What mishap a twisted mind can bring!

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Donnie Wolff 07 November 2014

Wow I'm glad you explained that because I would have a lot of questions for you... Haha great write, of course!

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Felicia Manning 07 November 2014

You painted a vivid picture in my head and it was very entertaining. Your poem has both passion and brutality mixed nicely into one twisted story. Good write as always :)

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Noreen Carden 26 February 2015

As always you weave a story to hold the readers attention a gruesome tale told with wonderful description. Well done

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Shania K. Younce 14 December 2014

I very much like this poem. It took me into its own sort of world. It was like reading a book and I could hardly tear my eyes from the page.

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Patricia Grantham 23 November 2014

A very thrilling and quite unique write. Almost left me chilled to the bone. Very intensive just like a movie. Passionate and enthralling.l

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Jessica Dehn 10 November 2014

hmmm don't we all truely have dual personality... just some are more aware then others. I love this. You were clearly able to show two sides with out a big reveal. Very sexy and disturbing. Wonderful job as always!

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Abekah Emmanuel 09 November 2014

Sometimes in life, so many things blindfold us from knowing the reality. This poem, fantastically narrates a very pitiful story with lots of poetic beauty a each stanza is connected nicely to the next with that chain of flowing ideas, the title chosen for this poem undoubtedly reflects the content as well as the themes in the poem. Though a sad poem, the diction employed here conveys a clear message and presents the exact imagery. I like this poem, very piteous but well written....Good job Enigma!

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