E Nigma


~an Obscene Scene~ - Poem by E Nigma

Welcome to the scene
There's some stains from a loather
A twisted love conveyed
By what's drained on the covers

Passions at their peak on the prowl
Through the process
Glistening lips that whisper
To the captain of the cockpit

Taking off what is
As they reach their elevation
Mile high club swinging
To the beat of penetration

A bitter lovers quarrel clung
To the carry on baggage
She's got the perfect view
On the manifest, her advantage

The clueless comfort felt
Through the long forgotten distance
Seperation mere illusion
As you'll learn from this instance

The housekeepers keycard snatched
While she's distracted
The calm before a storms
Forceful interaction

Slowly the door opens
To lovers lost in their sounds
Drenched in sweat, cheek to cheek
3 Hearts pound aloud

Shaken to her roots she always knew
But now she knows, frozen she's cold
Her hatred boils in what flows, finally
She's letting go, her blade, his throat

Topic(s) of this poem: Mystery


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This is a story of a flight attendant with split personality disorder who believes her husband, who is the captain, is cheating on her.
Though this infidelity only takes place within her mind. The fact is that sometimes she sleeps with her husband and other times
It is her other personality that does.

She only remembers bits and pieces of what takes place and it's because of this that she becomes paranoid to the point that she starts becoming lost within her fantasies that are actually part reality but, because she can only recall bits and pieces
she starts filling in the gaps of her memories with paranoid delusions.

It's at this point she plans on catching her husband, confronting and then killing him in the act. So one night while they are being intimate she pulls a blade an puts it to his throat confronting him and telling him to explain himself she's so angry she starts pushing the blade deep into his throat cutting him and as the blood starts to flow along with him explaining to her about her condition she finally realizes that he is telling the truth and that there was never really another woman but her other personality that was sleeping with him and it was then at this point that she feels completely overwhelmed by the truth of this startling revelation and she finally starts to let everything go.

Comments about ~an Obscene Scene~ by E Nigma

  • Noreen Carden (2/26/2015 12:37:00 PM)

    As always you weave a story to hold the readers attention a gruesome tale told with wonderful description. Well done (Report)Reply

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  • Shania K. Younce (12/14/2014 4:27:00 PM)

    I very much like this poem. It took me into its own sort of world. It was like reading a book and I could hardly tear my eyes from the page. (Report)Reply

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  • Patricia Grantham (11/23/2014 4:45:00 PM)

    A very thrilling and quite unique write. Almost left me
    chilled to the bone. Very intensive just like a movie.
    Passionate and enthralling.l
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  • Jessica Dehn (11/10/2014 9:27:00 PM)

    hmmm don't we all truely have dual personality... just some are more aware then others. I love this. You were clearly able to show two sides with out a big reveal. Very sexy and disturbing. Wonderful job as always! (Report)Reply

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  • Abekah Emmanuel (11/9/2014 1:31:00 PM)

    Sometimes in life, so many things blindfold us from knowing the reality. This poem, fantastically narrates a very pitiful story with lots of poetic beauty a each stanza is connected nicely to the next with that chain of flowing ideas, the title chosen for this poem undoubtedly reflects the content as well as the themes in the poem.
    Though a sad poem, the diction employed here conveys a clear message and presents the exact imagery.
    I like this poem, very piteous but well written....Good job Enigma!
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  • Hazel Durham (11/8/2014 12:23:00 PM)

    The mystery of a disturbed woman's mind written with such skill and creativity, you present the drama and the scene of how a persons imagination out of control is very dangerous. A chain of events bring the shocking conclusion chillingly ending in her realising she is wrong!
    Original and so entertaining!
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  • Felicia Manning (11/7/2014 7:29:00 PM)

    You painted a vivid picture in my head and it was very entertaining. Your poem has both passion and brutality mixed nicely into one twisted story. Good write as always :) (Report)Reply

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  • Kevin Patrick (11/7/2014 6:32:00 PM)

    A mixture of sensuality and morbidity and passionate insanity, if I were going to label a title for this I'd call it basic instinct 20 000 feet in the air. The opening lines reek of post coital tryst but then descend into a disturbing path of paranoid lust mixed with jealousy and hate. Right from the get go you know the narrator has problem recognizing reality, but being the narrator your not sure if there entirely basing their feelings or is actually happen. Its both arousing and disturbing something the very dark and twisted side of me likes quite a bit, and which shames me in wishing I had conceived.
    If I had to complain about something, you gave to much away in your note, I think you should have just let the reader come to their own conclusions without mentioning to them, it kind of ruins the fun coming to your own conclusions. But other then that this was a delectable treat worthy of psycho sexual fiction. When does the movie come out?
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  • Donnie Wolff (11/7/2014 2:25:00 PM)

    Wow I'm glad you explained that because I would have a lot of questions for you... Haha great write, of course! (Report)Reply

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  • Valsa George (11/7/2014 12:50:00 AM)

    Oh, my.....! Terror has struck my throat dry! What a ghastly scene you have drawn! Though this is pure imagination, I have heard of real incidents like this where paranoic partners have done similar things to their husbands/wives who were very possessive and who slowly developed a kind of obsessive suspicion about the fidelty of their spouse! It was so engaging from start to finish like reading a thriller story! What mishap a twisted mind can bring! (Report)Reply

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  • Mihaela Pirjol (11/6/2014 7:15:00 AM)

    This is an intense, powerful story with great use of metaphors, and vivid imagery pulsing at the primary human instincts: fear and passion. There is suspense and mystery in the last three stanzas till the end, till the last line.
    A really thought provoking poem!
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  • Chuy Amante (11/5/2014 8:31:00 PM)

    Good thing you told the story.
    I thought for sure it was about my ex
    and her cold blade and my warm neck


    nice write! ! !
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 5, 2014

Poem Edited: Thursday, November 6, 2014


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