Valsa George

As Coins Tinkled - Poem by Valsa George

As coins tinkled,

Many a virgin flower, defiled.
Brother turned brother’s assassin.
Dark untruth in white hues arrayed
Many got through the back door
Witnesses turned hostile
Many were bloodied and bruised

As coins tinkled;

The son of God was betrayed
With a kiss

As coins tinkled,

Empires were pulled down,
Kings dethroned,
Countries aligned against countries,
As coins tinkle……
History repeats through eons;

And betrayal
With masks donned!

Topic(s) of this poem: corruption

Form: Prose Poem

Comments about As Coins Tinkled by Valsa George

  • Bri Edwards (4/12/2015 1:46:00 PM)

    we in the UNITED STATES OF AMERICA...........God Bless Her! ..................... know of no such coin tinkling! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

    we use paper money, checks, electronic transfers and favors of whatever sort. WE ARE more advanced! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

    bri :)
    (Report) Reply

    Valsa George (4/13/2015 5:30:00 AM)

    Yes Bri, Once we were part of one of the most ancient civilizations of the world! Now we are becoming more ancient..... going to the cart age! ! ! !

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Geetha Jayakumar (4/10/2015 2:32:00 PM)

    A Beautiful poem Valsa, that brought the facts of life which we are going through. Everything just for coins. Very true said in each lines, its a history and going to repeat itself.

    Beautiful presentation. Loved reading it.

    I wrote a similar poem especially on greed but didn't publish it.
    (Report) Reply

  • (4/5/2015 9:15:00 AM)

    The refrain As coins tinkle add to the merit of the wonderful poem that deals with treachery, corruption, betrayal which are endless and timeless in the history of mankind. Thank you for this beautiful write, Valsa. (Report) Reply

  • Rajnish Manga (4/2/2015 10:50:00 AM)

    We all have observed history and events being repeated at regular intervals. History books, newspaper and magazine archives and even our dailies will provide us proof to corroborate your observation. What is appalling is the fact that some atrocious events continue to be repeated quite frequently with impunity as the coins tinkled. The matter assumes mammoth proportions going by the kind of response generated by this poem. I must thank, Valsa ji. (Report) Reply

  • Daniel Brick (3/30/2015 10:57:00 AM)

    Your poem uses the refrain AS COINS TINKLED to powerful effect. This is what American poets call a Poem of Witness. It used to be called political poetry, but any use of the politics is vexed. So Carolyn Forche and others coined the term Poem of Witness because that's what you are doing - looking steadily at what Shakespeare called THE WORLD'S SLIPPERY TURNS, not just the injustice and violence but the hypocrisy and indifference. (Report) Reply

  • Rajesh Thankappan (3/29/2015 2:18:00 AM)

    Money, though a necessity, is also the root cause of mammoth trouble that has plagued and ravaged the mankind through its history. A fabulous write. (Report) Reply

  • (3/26/2015 11:58:00 AM)

    The bitter truth spelt out fills this world with sorrow and care, fills the mind with the fruit of
    evil, robs the mind of peace.........a great poem with wonderful composition....10/10
    (Report) Reply

  • Stephen Katona (3/23/2015 8:13:00 PM)

    A powerful condemnation of money and the effect greed has had on our behaviour. I love the title which seems to give money its own voice and the way you've repeated the title to emphasize how the desire for money causes the same wrongs to repeat themselves throughout history. (Report) Reply

  • Lyn Paul (3/23/2015 5:17:00 PM)

    Thank you Valsa. This is a reminder to us all of the greedy. Have you ever heard the saying? ...Money doesn't make the world go round, but it makes the ride so much nicer..
    Yet greed really has taken over.
    (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (3/23/2015 12:22:00 PM)

    Money corrupts the weak minds and leads them to treacherous acts to acquire wealth by any means. There are many instances from history and mythology. These acts keep repeating. Beautifully presented in the poem as coins tinkled. (Report) Reply

  • (3/23/2015 12:25:00 AM)

    Truth hidden under a golden shine
    Human mind always support touch of solace, Love is really peaceful
    we want live a world gold of God live with us

    we want come together to live a peaceful world.....
    (Report) Reply

  • Madathil Rajendran Nair (3/22/2015 11:32:00 PM)

    M, am, you have come out pretty strong here. The poem is a river in rage. (10) (Report) Reply

  • Mantu Mahakul (3/22/2015 9:47:00 PM)

    It is matter of sad. Such things are happening due to greed of wealth or money. Many have forgotten values of life and humanity. A thought provoking poem shared really. Wonderful drafting. (Report) Reply

  • Brian Johnston (3/22/2015 5:00:00 PM)

    Yes, money is behind much of the evil in the world that we see, but could that mean the Bible is right then, that we are all born sinners in desperate need of Grace and that this is the root cause? What a miracle it is then that Christ's blood was shed to redeem the world and save our souls. Gives new meaning to the phrase, 'For God so loved the world...' (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (3/22/2015 9:36:00 AM)

    You are right but I could not understand as to why the coins tinkle? (Report) Reply

  • Jayatissa K. Liyanage (3/22/2015 9:27:00 AM)

    Absolutely so, be it in West, East, North or South, immaterial. Coins ruin ethics and values all over. Wonderful writing. Thank you for sharing. It's 10 from me. (Report) Reply

  • (3/22/2015 9:12:00 AM)

    Happenings of the world is just like the events narrated in this poem. likes. (Report) Reply

Read all 18 comments »

Read this poem in other languages

This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.

I would like to translate this poem »

word flags

Poem Submitted: Sunday, March 22, 2015

Poem Edited: Sunday, March 22, 2015

[Report Error]