Aspergia Poem by Vijay Sai R

Aspergia



Fixed eyelids
Falling gait
No gesture
Erect posture
Restless ever
Counting seconds
Waiting to quit
Struggling to hold
An on-going conversation
Everything in life
Seems so hard
To acquire, but
Still fights
To survive
One more day!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Crystal Bradley 17 July 2010

Nice, simple, and to the point. Nicely worded too. I liked it. Thanks for the read.

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Kolawole Ajao 18 July 2010

Solid, straightforward poem.

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Dwi Utami 18 July 2010

simple tink simple god: thumb: : +80hmmm god luck.

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Baru Gobira 18 July 2010

A sense of postponement of the inevitable pervades the poem. Like it. -Baru Gobira

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Mazwi Sedibe 18 July 2012

Good one great one, although i am battlilng to understand the tittle, oh but thats poetry i keeps you on your toes everytime in search for sense and meaning of our surroundings, this means to me you are a good write, since you can intrigger thought.love Da Maiz.w! (the victim)

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Louis Cecile 20 September 2010

Nicely structure short style of poetry. Though I think the pacing to the end could be sharper. However a good piece of work overall.

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Noura J. 30 July 2010

i really really like this :) one thing i don't like is the exclamation point at the end..idk i just feel like it takes something away from the rest of the poem. taht's just my suggestion though. again, really really good poem <3 hope to see more.

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Michael Ryan 20 July 2010

Its good, Keep writing and let our fate recreate ;)

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Katherine Cobing 20 July 2010

neatly done. :) 10= for you, my friend.

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Vijay Sai R

Vijay Sai R

Trichy, South India
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