poet Hasmukh Amathalal

Hasmukh Amathalal

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Backlash

Neither had I feared a backlash
Nor attempted to make eye wash
Wished smooth passage and no down fall
Prayed almighty not to face any distress call

Childhood passed off easily under the protection
Parents looked after well without my action
I was lucky to have their protective shield
Seeds were growing and offering high yield

Horizon seemed to me vast and open
Blue sky and earth were no less than heaven
I could think of major leap forward
Acts of brave person and not that of coward

I had to be reasonably alert and cautious
World and people around seemed to be vicious
Making headway was concern and cause of worry
Still it did not bother as I was not in hurry

I had to learn a lot from rising sun
Reaching on the top without making run
Not to fall back from destiny under slight pretext
It was high time to undergo vigorous test

Let it not prove as difficult task
Honest dealing without putting on mask
I may suffer heavily on this count
Difficulties may surface and pressure mount

I shall withstand the waves and shocks
Sea waters may rush and knock at the rocks
Will do everything to wither the storm
Brave front always to remain in form

Luck or no luck but can weaken the spirit
Best efforts should be made on merit
We may face down fall or momentary setback
It may teach lessons from the drawbacks

Poem Submitted: Saturday, November 7, 2009
Poem Edited: Monday, July 11, 2011

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Comments about Backlash by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Kelvin Karani (12/11/2009 9:52:00 AM)

    I had to learn a lot from rising sun
    Reaching on the top without making run.

    That is what you've done, poetically.

    I'm particularly impressed by your rhymes and images

    thanks for sharing

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  • Eyan Desir (11/20/2009 10:28:00 AM)

    Nice wording
    good job

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  • Rafique Farooqi (11/15/2009 8:38:00 AM)

    Wished smooth passage and no down fall
    Prayed almighty not to face any distress call

    Childhood passed off easily under the protection
    Parents looked after well without my action
    I was lucky to have their protective shield
    Seeds were growing and offering high yield

    Horizon seemed to me vast and open
    Blue sky and earth were no less than heaven
    I could think of major leap forward

    life moves with time in progress under umbrella of both parents, guiding and educating...., one is lucky to have all the best in the life, and gets able to stand erect in the society.............wonderful poem

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  • Meggie GultianoMeggie Gultiano (11/12/2009 5:47:00 AM)

    I had to learn a lot from rising sun
    Reaching on the top without making run
    Not to fall back from destiny under slight pretext
    It was high time to undergo vigorous test
    ................................
    beautiful piece..beautiful lines..So inspiring to read

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  • Antonio Liao (11/10/2009 6:31:00 PM)

    Beautifully landscape of poetry.....this is a poem for refreshing and for
    stress management.....just a ponder would mean a lot to unlock
    our emotional pain.....recommended for people who have no reason to
    pacify them selves....no reason the...Why of this world.....this would
    help their doubt.....thank you for sharing...and God bless you my friend
    a 10....and a Star

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  • giggling wonder (11/10/2009 10:22:00 AM)

    i loved ur poem it was great i give it a 10

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  • Mailrangam Visvanathan Venkataraman (11/10/2009 9:33:00 AM)

    Dear respected poet,

    Your poetry is exemplary I totally agree.
    All the best, with regards,

    M V VENKATARAMAN

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  • Seema(Aanamika) 80 (11/10/2009 2:58:00 AM)

    Wonderful poem, i enjoyed reading it....10

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  • Chand Shikari (11/9/2009 10:55:00 PM)

    Neither had I feared a backlash
    Nor attempted to make eye wash
    Wished smooth passage and no down fall

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  • Natasha Rathod (11/9/2009 8:11:00 PM)

    Neither had I feared a backlash
    Nor attempted to make eye wash.very good poem indeed....10

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  • Amanda Eckols (11/9/2009 7:42:00 PM)

    I very much enjoy reading your words. =) thanks for shareing.

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  • Eyan Desir (11/9/2009 5:52:00 AM)

    Well structure poem
    good write

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  • Anju Addanki (11/8/2009 11:32:00 PM)

    Just can say a wonderful poem.

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  • Brendon Carey (11/8/2009 7:31:00 PM)

    This really captures all of the struggles that one can face during their lives. Put together very well and the rhyming scheme was well placed as well. May you be successful with publishing your memoir.

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  • Ravi ARavi A (11/8/2009 11:43:00 AM)

    'Honest dealing without putting on mask
    I may suffer heavily on this count
    Difficulties may surface and pressure mounts' - The world at large is holding this view and it is an incorrect view. Honesty is the best policy. All of us have the concept of Honesty but the problem with us is that we expect this from the rest of the world in the first place. This will not work. The world is also expecting the same from us in the first place and do we bother to exhibit it on our own? Can we tolerate the dishonesty of our children? Can they tolerate the dishonesty of their parents? The same law applies to the whole world. It is always the best to take the initiative measures from our own side. This applies not in the case of honesty but in all of the qualities of the heart - love, kindness, empathy etc. The entire world is only in the expectation of the receipt of these and it is not bothered to give out in the first place. We need a reflection on this subject.

    Another thing. We are not going to learn lessons out of our setbacks and shortcomings and blows. If we can see our blows as a witness, it may be purposeful. It is just like saying that war is a must to learn the value of peace. Even without war we can remain at peace. This is the point. Even without having blows, we can lead a peaceful, dignified life. Blows are not in the material situations but in the interpretation of the situations. How we take on is most important. Our Vedanta does not say that blows are necessary to avoid blows in future. Practically we don't learn any lessons out of our blows. If then, we would have said goodbye to Harthals, Bundhs, strikes and the like very long time ago.

    Dalsukh S (11/8/2009 8: 38: 00 AM)

    Wished smooth passage and no down fall
    Prayed almighty not face any distress call

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  • Prince Obed de la CruzPrince Obed de la Cruz (11/8/2009 8:07:00 AM)

    i don't know why but after i have seen the last verse, i remembered the saying 'blame bad luck, not yourself'

    anyway nice write

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  • Yacov Mitchenko (11/8/2009 4:04:00 AM)

    This poem, in a general way, speaks of the necessity of hardship and learning the lessons those hardships have for us. Thoughtful, as usual, but rather too general. Thank you, sir.


    If you have the time, please read 'Hospital Walls', 'My Father', 'Autumn Tree', and 'The Epileptic Fit'.

    Other suggestions for later: 'Billowing Rain on a Sunday', 'Thomas R. Intellect', and 'You're Lying There Still Asleep'.

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