My life has ended two days ago
when you allowed your heart to someone else go
what a fool i am, i still love you although
you`ve left me without thinking what you me owe
i lived in the dream world that has no flaw
while considered reality my major foe
death counts anxiously minutes by exact
every minute that passes reminds me with the fact
that with the passage of time past becomes more past
and that enlightens your leaving`s impact
all my feelings i have just packed
because i am going where love does not last
Your poem is good, I love it...........well I love it so much
Huhuhuhuhu, , so sad, , it's too much pain, I feel that too when I broke up with my boyfriends, and that's too much hurt, , This is a nice poem, , (^_^) Naru Kaede, ,
beautifully written....very touching....this is very painful i guess....nice poem...written from deep within..all emotions are being poured out...accepting the bitterness and the moving on........10+++++... MERRY CHRISTMAS......
because i am going where love does not last? -> please let me know if you ever find that place...
Very good, you picked the right words that describe your silent despair... Are you cold blooded? I am.
ohhh, the pain, when with thunder comes rain. good write 10+
very sweet it's silent to me compared to your other poems but I really do like this one
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
vividly expressed feeling, but i'd work on the structure some more...it feels like you're trying to express too much in too few words