Tareq Jalabi

Broken Up With

My life has ended two days ago
when you allowed your heart to someone else go
what a fool i am, i still love you although
you`ve left me without thinking what you me owe
i lived in the dream world that has no flaw
while considered reality my major foe

death counts anxiously minutes by exact
every minute that passes reminds me with the fact
that with the passage of time past becomes more past
and that enlightens your leaving`s impact
all my feelings i have just packed
because i am going where love does not last

Poem Submitted: Wednesday, June 18, 2008
Poem Edited: Monday, June 20, 2011

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  • Rana ZalloumRana Zalloum (9/7/2010 6:36:00 AM)

    because i am going where love does not last? -> please let me know if you ever find that place...

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  • Jessie Bernabe Cadsawan (11/22/2009 3:32:00 PM)

    Very good, you picked the right words that describe your silent despair... Are you cold blooded? I am.

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  • Sherri Coulter (9/12/2009 11:48:00 AM)

    ohhh, the pain, when with thunder comes rain. good write 10+

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  • Riya RiskaRiya Riska (6/5/2009 11:41:00 AM)

    Ough...
    Blue..as your eyes..

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  • Ana Guerrero (3/13/2009 11:57:00 AM)

    very sweet it's silent to me compared to your other poems but I really do like this one

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  • Kelsey Tennant (1/8/2009 4:41:00 PM)

    oh my goodness thats exactly how i feel right now! ! ! thats AMAZING! ! !

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  • anne adam (1/1/2009 4:48:00 AM)

    it seem that iam not the only one who's in love lol but i really like it, keep it up

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  • Katherine Ng Li Hoon (12/30/2008 8:59:00 PM)

    Vow! Great write! I enjoy it!

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  • Jennifer Sollmann (12/30/2008 5:12:00 PM)

    i love the last line! 'gone to a place where love does not go' it's simply beautiful.: ]

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  • Hailie Workman (12/28/2008 8:58:00 PM)

    i love it. its so emotional and deep. nice!

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  • Miriam Maia PaduaMiriam Maia Padua (12/23/2008 8:37:00 PM)

    beautifully written....very touching....this is very painful i guess....nice poem...written from deep within..all emotions are being poured out...accepting the bitterness and the moving on........10+++++...
    MERRY CHRISTMAS......

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  • Naru Kaede (12/3/2008 8:25:00 AM)

    Huhuhuhuhu, , so sad, , it's too much pain,
    I feel that too when I broke up with my boyfriends,
    and that's too much hurt, ,
    This is a nice poem, , (^_^)

    Naru Kaede, ,

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  • Reina Lorenzo (11/22/2008 8:02:00 AM)

    personal? ?
    this is really a great piece..

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  • Kallie Madison (11/20/2008 2:14:00 PM)

    Your poem is good, I love it...........well I love it so much

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  • Liliana NegoiLiliana Negoi (8/5/2008 1:51:00 PM)

    vividly expressed feeling, but i'd work on the structure some more...it feels like you're trying to express too much in too few words

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  • Shruti Modi (7/30/2008 2:21:00 PM)

    i can connect to it....ive been thru sumhing similar...
    it comes right frm ur heart and touches right into my heart....

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  • Sarwar ChowdhurySarwar Chowdhury (7/17/2008 1:57:00 PM)

    Words came out from heart! ....mind-blowing! well done.

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  • Francesca Lam (7/17/2008 10:13:00 AM)

    It's kinda sad~ but i like it~

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  • Mohammad Al-kurdi (6/25/2008 2:33:00 PM)

    nice rhime
    as always fine
    I see a broken love
    which is not mine
    cuz there will be hope this time...........

    go ahead...

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  • Bianca B. (6/20/2008 3:04:00 PM)

    I like it it expresses your feelings

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