Concrete Spider Poem by Annabel Cruz

Concrete Spider

Rating: 4.0


Up, up
The smooth and glassy surface of my shower
He crawled
His delicate spindly legs glued, as if by magic
To the slippery wall
Navigating rivers and waterfalls most blissfully
Until a random
splash of water washed him down

Down

Down

Down

Down

Into a huddled mass
Of tangled legs
Twitching, twitching
On the shower floor

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Edward Kofi Louis 07 February 2016

To respect nature with things seen around you. Thanks for sharing.

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Brian Jani 14 July 2014

this is q nice and simple piece of writing.spiders in our homes, natural insect control.

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Adeline Foster 04 August 2012

I too love shape poetry. To off-set the lines perhaps one could use.~`. Just a thought, even without it this is good. Adeline

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Juan Olivarez 24 May 2012

I like it, experianced the same thing a few years ago.

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Unwritten Soul 13 May 2012

Nice one! ! i like it....maybe it a tribute to spiderman too hahahaha :) nice write! _Unwritten Soul

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage 07 February 2016

For the spider to huddle with tangled twitching legs...........? How did that thundering splash come on the itsy -bitsy spider.... Mr Poet? So much about it beneath those written lines, I feel. Thought provoking nicely written poem. Enjoyed.

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Susan Williams 07 February 2016

Quite descriptive of the itsy bitsy spider

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Godfrey Morris 07 February 2016

Enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing.

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Kim Barney 07 February 2016

Life is so delicate and precarious. This poem is delicate and beautiful. Thanks for sharing and congrats on Poem of the Day!

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Souren Mondal 07 February 2016

A very well crafted poem on minute observation... The imagery and the words are beautiful.. Thanks for sharing :)

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