Amir Foroughi

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Decrepitude - Poem by Amir Foroughi

Again no remorse or sorrow
No scream of butterflies for tomorrow
No words of motion
No glances of emotion
Trace of hope is the felon despise
Oceans of tears growing in eyes
Steeped in freedom of loneliness inside
No god here to relive to subside
Strings of heart torn
By strings of music fires to be born
The tranquil chaos in the rain
Laying naked under arrows of sustain
Oh on the lap of hell
To go in the alleys with a broken bell
Live is to try harder
To get lost farther
At last to fail
To look at death and blissfully hail
Hail death
Adieu life

Comments about Decrepitude by Amir Foroughi

  • Zoya Khalid (6/5/2012 10:34:00 AM)

    Good work...but Mehraneh Hosseini has commented. (Report) Reply

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  • (12/23/2011 4:37:00 PM)

    Nice job, I love it's rhyme.Adieu life? why? where is the place of HOPE in your poem? or TELEOLOGY, ONTOLOGY, EPISTEMOLOGY? believe that such a life is aimless.
    Keep working
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  • Unwritten Soul (10/20/2011 3:29:00 AM)

    We never see how around pull us below to underground but we deny the things when we up to the sky.... creating boundary between freedom and caged, confusing your soul to stay in body or move without physical, never doubt this poem so sharply hit the note on poetry keys but in hope of full of black, pain and things to torture...break the air that you breathe now, and in another dimension you should enter...where the the pain and happy in balance intensity..we will never feel good if we used to be in we stay in dark and blame the room for the dark, go out collapse the wall let the sunshine in tp reach your skin..Lovely right but need more spirit to fight..talented to kill fearfulness_Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • (8/10/2009 1:30:00 AM)

    rhyming is very good, poem flows gently.. (Report) Reply

  • Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (8/7/2009 11:34:00 AM)

    A very positive thoughts equipped with much poetic elements.Good job Amir. (Report) Reply

  • (8/7/2009 8:39:00 AM)

    Good flow, good write (Report) Reply

  • (8/7/2009 6:50:00 AM)

    life lives till hopes live..good write.. (Report) Reply

  • (8/7/2009 6:32:00 AM)

    excellent poem..beautifully expressed... (Report) Reply

  • (8/7/2009 5:36:00 AM)

    Life and death are mysteries and one has to experience them both in order to understand the unity that is Life. A very good write Amir! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, August 7, 2009

Poem Edited: Friday, October 7, 2011

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