A great arena of induced fake profound
Where warriors plucked their stoned swords
From the graveyard of the blurred fortress
Monuments hanging on forsaken gates
They flew through deep below
With tamed feathers blowing horn
King's wisdom behind both ears
Eyes blinded by whispered pleas
Deep down below were snows of silver whiteness
Silhouette beauties of Gods and Goddesses
Unstained innocence on fountain of truth
Where every identity transparently produced
As warriors touched the silver floor
And flakes had kissed their swollen thorns
Stone swords sounded the crushing beat
Pouring blood on the angel's whitish
Lifeless below now and frozen charm
Fountain of truth awaken the time
Ears, eyes had broken and king's forgotten
Alas! Untwined from great delusion
But trapped from sin's imprison
(I MADE THIS POEM WHEN I WAS IN HIGHSCHOOL. MY CLASSMATES ASKED ME TO MAKE TO BE GIVEN TO ONE PARTICULAR MENTOR. A MENTOR WERE EVERY STUDENT BEEN A SLAVE..AND NO KNOWLEDGE HAD BEEN PASS, BUT OF HATRED AND GRIEF ON MOST HIS ACTS. WHERE HE IS RIGHT NOW I DON'T KNOW. BUT I PRAY FOR HIS BLESSEDLY CHANGE.)
great start..as I noticed written in high school..it should be graded A..a nice composition for a start...Does your teacher an English Literature Teacher, who knows Shakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe and et. al? or knows Balagtas or balagtasan only..this is a wonderful poem... Ency Bearis
too good dear for high school class it surely deserves an A+ regards anjali
even since that age.. you had and still have a poetic soul.. its amazing dear sweet girl..
your school time poem reads good, Min...reflects the talent that sprouted that early in you...10
Graphically poignant given the poems intent. Wrought with outstanding imagery and emotion, just an excellent poem.
Lifeless below now and frozen charm Fountain of truth awaken the time Ears, eyes had broken and king's forgotten Alas! Untwined from great delusion But trapped from sin's imprison...........................wonerful piece of work that makes me speechless by its beauty of grace yet with metaphors and imagery, well penned,10++++, thanks
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A very nice piece of work.Thank you for sharing it with us; and to learn from your experiences in during your High School days as well. Edward Kofi Louis.