Anita Atina


Discordant Notes - Poem by Anita Atina

Why is it that we remain tied down in pain

To relationships that have turned cancerous


Is breaking away so difficult

Does fear keep the choice at bay?


Fear of loneliness, what will the neighbours say?

A child’s innocence that you shield from pain


Drifted apart spiritually

But caged in the same home


Attacking each other at the slightest provocation

Scraping a bloody sore, doesn’t change a thing, only deepens the pain


Tried counseling, staying apart, and coming back again

To the same refrain, so what’s to gain?


Accepting that we are different

Not bad people, but may be unsuitable for each other


Even though we fell in love, ages ago

Our differences haven’t melted away, but come to the fore


We are two prongs of a tuning fork

Vibrating at different frequencies


Even if we hit the same base over and over again

We won’t sound the same


These discordant notes

Aren’t going to change


Is breaking away a new beginning

Or just a one way ticket


That sets you free from one cage

Into another lonelier place?


Comments about Discordant Notes by Anita Atina

  • (4/29/2008 12:16:00 PM)


    Anita, a poignant message sent out with this beautiful poem. Two heart can fall out of love just as easily as they fell into it. Top marks and thanks for sharing this my friend.
    David
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  • (4/8/2008 11:01:00 PM)


    Yes...this is a painful dilemma I know all to well, so well expressed... (Report) Reply

  • (4/4/2008 10:52:00 PM)


    Such a lullaby two hearts must listens to, to know the pain is the same no matter how you play it. (Report) Reply

  • (4/4/2008 9:39:00 AM)


    Indeed, 'two tuning forks vibrating at different frequencies! '
    Vivid imagery from the cancerous pair to discordant tuning forks!

    Concrete images that convey the underlying emotion - that's poetry!
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  • (4/4/2008 1:58:00 AM)


    emotions are explicitely drawn.., sometimes discordedness may be fatal to a relationship... but the world tunes in different frequeny altogether, ,
    very well expressed...
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 3, 2008

Poem Edited: Tuesday, June 10, 2008


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