Dislocation Poem by ONElia AVElar

Dislocation

Rating: 3.1


I sent you a kiss
via air, alas
The wind was not
In your direction!
It blew it far away
from here
another cheek became
a promised landing pier
Oh dear, we tend to
overestimate the
conductivity of the air.

Sofia,02. June 2008

Tuesday, June 3, 2008
Topic(s) of this poem: june
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Indira Renganathan 25 August 2008

Overestimate the conductivity of air....true not only for love in every other sense..nice write10

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Chitra - 14 July 2008

wonderful! interesting title

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Original Unknown Girl 26 June 2008

Had to come back to this one. It's so very clever, multi-layered and delivering many messages the more you read it. HG: -) xx

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C. P. Sharma 13 June 2008

Beautifully said. The kiss may land anywhere, Its fragrance of love is in the air.

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Rani Turton 10 June 2008

Original and amusing. Kisses that land where they shouldn't...food for thought!

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Indira Babbellapati 26 August 2009

it's so much in the fitness of things...doesn't everything begin with a particular objective and end up as something else...we're all wind-prone!

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Original Unknown Girl 05 May 2009

How wonderful to imagine a kiss sent along the air and landing on some unsuspecting person's cheek! ! ! Bet they were thrilled... Lovely poem Onelia. HG: -) xx

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C. P. Sharma 02 December 2008

Awonderful mix up of humour and sarcam. Loved it. O dear, you sent a flying kiss, Such kisses many a time miss. LOL! ! ! ! !

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Pacific Hernandez 30 September 2008

Nice poem, a kiss went astray and landed on another cheek. 10 for this.

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Ashraful Musaddeq 11 September 2008

Wow! How nice is form of the poem; how beautiful is the content of the poem! Really nice job done so far sending a kiss! Enjoyed.

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