From A Distance Poem by Valerie Dohren

From A Distance

Rating: 5.0


Oh it was beautiful …….. from a distance

How it glistened and shimmered in the sunlight
like a diamond cast down from heaven ….. I thought

Or maybe the eye of an angel

or Galadriel's mirror

or a pool of water, reflecting the day's gentle glow


So splendid it was

I had to know …..


But it was just a piece of old jagged glass
part of a broken bottle, cast aside
by a drunken fool

And I …….. deluded!

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
At attempt at a more modern format, somewhat different from my usual style.....
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lyn Paul 05 May 2013

Really enjoyed your modern format especially a diamond cast down from Heaven Will there be more?

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Valsa George 03 May 2013

Only a poet of your bent of mind will thus be deluded and only a poet of your calibre can invest so much beauty in a broken piece of glass! Splendid! !

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Kavya . 03 May 2013

it actually happens....things from a distance appears to be something else than what it is when we go closer...a very nice representation of a broken glass that shmmered like a diamond cast from the heaven

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Shahzia Batool 01 May 2013

Being the vers libre, Yes, it is different from your stanza form, but beats and pulse, breaks and pauses are still Valerie Dohren brand...T.S.Eliot rightly said that Free-verse is not Free verse! ... the ending is dramatic! a mutually shared delusion! ! !

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Chandra Thiagarajan 01 May 2013

A departure from your usual style - - but LOVELY! Can we say distance lends enchantment to the view?

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Heather Wilkins 19 June 2013

nicely penned. I like different styles of poetry. it helps keep the work fresh and appealing.

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Kelvin Owusu 14 May 2013

different from your usual style but done with such grace, a good write

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Unwritten Soul 12 May 2013

Different style maybe but never stop from pleasing readers mind...i love this! _Soul

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John Brown 11 May 2013

Different indeed Val. Reminds me of D.H.Lawrence's style in some ways. Nice poem.

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Ambrosia A 09 May 2013

Very nicely penned. Only a poetic heart can appreciate so many things over a piece of glass.

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