Oh it was beautiful …….. from a distance
How it glistened and shimmered in the sunlight
like a diamond cast down from heaven ….. I thought
Or maybe the eye of an angel
or Galadriel's mirror
or a pool of water, reflecting the day's gentle glow
So splendid it was
I had to know …..
But it was just a piece of old jagged glass
part of a broken bottle, cast aside
by a drunken fool
And I …….. deluded!
Only a poet of your bent of mind will thus be deluded and only a poet of your calibre can invest so much beauty in a broken piece of glass! Splendid! !
it actually happens....things from a distance appears to be something else than what it is when we go closer...a very nice representation of a broken glass that shmmered like a diamond cast from the heaven
Being the vers libre, Yes, it is different from your stanza form, but beats and pulse, breaks and pauses are still Valerie Dohren brand...T.S.Eliot rightly said that Free-verse is not Free verse! ... the ending is dramatic! a mutually shared delusion! ! !
A departure from your usual style - - but LOVELY! Can we say distance lends enchantment to the view?
nicely penned. I like different styles of poetry. it helps keep the work fresh and appealing.
different from your usual style but done with such grace, a good write
Different style maybe but never stop from pleasing readers mind...i love this! _Soul
Different indeed Val. Reminds me of D.H.Lawrence's style in some ways. Nice poem.
Very nicely penned. Only a poetic heart can appreciate so many things over a piece of glass.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Really enjoyed your modern format especially a diamond cast down from Heaven Will there be more?