Ghost Poem 1 (Where Ghosts Hide)
Under lock and key, in dark corners
They are the shadows of the past
Secrets wrapped in handkerchiefs
Moths hovering like stranded memories
They are the subconscious breaking the surface
Sudden slips of the tongue falling on dinner plates
Our innermost fears and desires
Bleeding when we least expect it
They are the silent longings, startled hearts
Phantom dreams, muffled cries into pillows
Ghost Poem 2 (A Feel For Ghosts)
I’m drawn to ghosts …I write about them
It’s ironic since I haven’t seen one myself
Literally - the misty grey form they talk about
Veiled shadows
I envy my mother who has witnessed these phantoms
She swears they exist - apparitions of relatives, friends
And once, a total stranger in my sister’s house
And of course there’s Nesitette
The “imaginary friend” my sister and I once had
when we were little girls, we have no memory of her
but my mother remembers us calling her by name
So I guess that’s why I believe they are real
as this pen between my fingers
What my mother never spoke about, I can
Understand why, the other kind of ghost
I learned to recognize on my own as I grew older
Ghosts of the past returning, abandoned dreams
ghosts of old desires, haunted memories
I sometimes feel like a ghost myself
An empty vessel, a fading light
Deaf-mute, invisible, people looking past me
Are they blind? … is life passing me by?
Am I dreaming I’m a memory?
They say people who die without knowng
hang around, lost in familiar places
attached to names and faces
A stranger out of place, time a confusing haze
I feel like I’m haunted
Then there are the poems not written
By me at all... makes me wonder...
Am I a ghostwriter?
The second one is sweet too, realistic things talked about..good simlie used in as real as the pen.....facts about how ghosts are born...and then finally the poems unwritten.... Wow is the word
Sonya The first one is hillarious...shall have to read thru the 2nd one again...to tell u how gud a poet u are
I have to agree with M. Peat - the first poem is an absolute stunner. Simply and keenly observed, with perfect descriptive lines. This is a true 'ghost poem'...it is immortal. Poem 2 strikes a chord or two...the 'did I really see that? ' moments that haunt logical minds: -)
I'm not taking any blame for these poems at all.... Actually your rewrite on both poems is grand. And I still think the short one is a mind boggler that grips the heart. Kept in handkerchiefs is just too good. I want to have written that line. I even think it's better than my 'ghost poem' poem. It's a powerhouse of a poem for sure. Then the second one that deals with Ghosts from every direction is strong as well. You have done wonders from where they began with that conversation. You have weeded the garden and planted new flowers..Now they bloom on their own. Great poems. a poet friend RH Peat
A difficult theme very cleverly penned...I like the last four lines of the first one the most for they speak the truth very well...second one too is excellent...marvellous attempt...thank you
The poem is excellent.10++ Actually, I read 'ghost poem' which is written by the poet 'Ronald Peat'. Frankly, both of them are perfect! ! Merna.
These wonderful poems serve to highlight your linguistic skill and diversity - the same subject viewed from totally different angles in contrasting styles, yet both have an impact - the first for its admirable figurative language, and the second for its history, questing honesty and underlying humour. S :)
Both are unique pieces Sonya....I like the first one for its beautiful imagery....10++
.both poems are captivating and intriguing Sonya....thoroughly enjoyed....
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Both poems are excellent. Ghost Poem 1 is truly extraordinary. Brilliant use of metaphor in this one. Your poetry is uniquely your own.10/10. Love, SandraX