Hauntings And Dulcets Poem by Tiffany Rose Moczydlowski

Hauntings And Dulcets

Rating: 4.8


Absolve me, my love
This pain has conquered me
One last defense
Against its harsh artillery
Break away
From its temporary doom
Bid me farewell
I'll destroy this empty tomb

Aimless wand'ring
Winding paths are weary
Wounded thoughts consume
Mood made dreary
My tired arms open
A way to be free, I seek
As harboring such pain
Is heavy, this grief

Place of purity
Location of the unmarred
Tainted and destroyed
Preservation in disregard
Fury spreads through me
Why did it you abandon?
Heartache entombs me
Innocence now a phantom

So I linger in the taste
Of your poision, so pleasing
Hopeless to detect
Entering with ease, seizing
My attenuated mind
For trust had dwelled there
Tranquility's reign
All forgotten, despair

Returning to you
I no longer am forlorn
Unplanned betrayal
Purged from my skin, have thorns
Haunted words turned dulcet
No longer can deny
Presence in your life, is vital
So I steel myself and forgive my sky

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Poetheart Morgan 22 September 2012

Tiffany, loves hurts! ! ! But each one of each a different way! ! ! ! Beautiful poem! !

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Mark Walters 22 September 2012

I liked this one. I would shorten the stanzas a bit, both in content per line (i.e. less adjectives and adverbs. Makes it more interesting and reads less like prose) . Also, I would either combine or delet some of the stanzas. Try and say more with less. Thanks, mark Absolve me, my love Pain has conquered me One last defense Against harsh artillery Break away From temporary doom Bid me farewell Destroy this empty tomb

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Tom Higgins 23 September 2012

You are only sixteen Tiffany, and you already show a great natural understanding of language, and how to make words paint a picture in the reader's mind. I am fifty eight and I only started writing poetry three years ago, and before that I had never written more than a postcard since leaving school. So young lady you are already showing you have ability, and if you work to develop that ability, you will get better and better, and as you grow older the experience of daily living will help you to gain insight into human behaviour that you currently have not had the time to develop. Keep writing, and reading!

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Katina Logan 27 November 2012

you are very talented i loved it

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wow great job! your gifted.

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Fox Nekitsune 25 November 2013

there are three things I like about this poem,1) the title suits the mood of the poem very well 2) it feels like painting when I am sad, and 3) its flow is excellent smoothly moving from stanza to stanza. though I personally feel like something remained unsaid here.. very enjoyable.

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Matthew Peel 02 January 2013

A great poem.... Very talented. Keep up the great work!

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Hazel Durham 02 January 2013

Beautiful, heartfelt poem with amazing lines describing your great angst over betrayal but you realize you can't live without him! ! Excellent write! !

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Tommy Laster 27 December 2012

You ask me to check your work because you are kind of new at it and I see that you are good at it and you should keep it up their is nothing you need to change....this is a really good piece

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shivering, speechless! ! Good Job! ! ! [3 [3 [3 [3 [3

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