From a shock of trees it sifts
in, spreading a black
hush over the water, dims
the grass at her feet tucked
under the grey skirt
showing
brown calves and a bit of ankle;
blows white ruffles
on the swell of her bosom, gleams
the gold ring on the third finger
of her left hand as
she tries to mend the buckle
of her shoe, hair waving
over a face half-hidden - the night
hovers
a moment round that still
sedulous shape,
seeps softly
up the bare foot
and blurs.
Nicely written Tan, I am reading more as I go along......regards............willow
The words 'sifts in', ''hush', 'dims', 'half-hidden', 'hovers', 'seeps' and 'blurs' are the colours an impressionistic painter would employ to draw the subtlety of your picture. A sharp eye for details, a lover's. Beautiful. Susie.
Very nice...Soft subtle but giving every detail...I enjoyed it :)
romantic yet engulfing, i seem drawn in by the subtlty of your observations bravo!
TAN... A maticulously detailed piece of work.My take is that you attempt here, to create YOUR '''Impression ''' of some type of portrait of your enamor & have well suceeded in the process. ~F.J.R.~
I love poems that leave much unsaid, only hinted at. Here you have shadows and outlines, vague forms, fleeting impressions. And one is left wondering, guessing, never quite sure. A beautiful poem. Julia
A moment in time. A troubled woman with a troubled marriage fraught with difficulty not of her making. This is the outset of her trouble. One is reminded of the separation between the human animal and a man made society. A vivid picture (impressionistic in style) painted here not with paint and brush but with words through skill.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Ah yes, the feminine form. I'm impressed. What a beautiful subject in any setting.