poet Susan Williams

Susan Williams

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see the technologists wearing yellow gowns, gloves, and masks
examining
the leftovers of our violence
seeing
fleeting
glimpses
of something not meant for eyes or ears
or the spirit inside us
whispering about eternity
while the clock is ticking
I can't hear what people are saying
but they can't hear me either
so what difference does it make
if you seek me and find me
or if you don't
the clock is ticking
either way
my presence has been hit and miss lately
I am toxic
I am losing interest
even with music dancing on the breeze
singing amid the leaves
a song known as the order of the seasons
the clock is ticking so loudly now
I can't hear what people are saying
and they can't hear me either
but I can hear the holy heartbeat abound
above the sounds of our earthly battleground
I can see the holy heartbeat abound
in the trees silvered with moonlight
yet there is no day and neither is there night
the clock is ticking for each of us
see the technologists wearing yellow gowns, gloves, and masks
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~~~~~~~~©2019 Susan Williams

Topic(s) of this poem: life and death

Poem Submitted: Monday, February 25, 2019

Form: Verse


Poet's Notes about The Poem

First off, I am not in the hospital dying!What I did was take phrases from my old poems, type them in no particular order, and then made a poem out of them.I am definitely going to do this patchwork quilt like thing again.

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Comments about Last Words by Susan Williams

  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (8/30/2020 2:56:00 AM)

    Robert! ! That would make a great quote! ! !

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  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (8/10/2020 3:39:00 AM)

    Anjandev, Thank you for the very welcome words of commendation! !

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  • Anjandev Roy (8/3/2020 12:45:00 AM)

    This is absolutely glorious write......thank u.....anjandev roy.

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  • Soran M. HSoran M. H (2/3/2020 6:25:00 AM)

    Definitely you have used (ticking clock) very amazingly in between the lines, then you have described some special inner moments that hasn't been discovered by many poets yet, I would say 10 ++ for this brilliant work with many interpretations...
    the clock is ticking for each of us

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/17/2020 12:33:00 AM)

    thank you for examining this poem closely as to how it works... your observations are very helpful!

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  • Edward Kofi LouisEdward Kofi Louis (1/6/2020 2:08:00 PM)

    Inner self! !
    To search for yourself!
    Inner world! ! !
    Identification;
    As the clock ticks along.


    Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/17/2020 12:28:00 AM)

    Thank you, Edward for dropping by! !

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (10/30/2019 6:18:00 AM)

    I can't hear what people are saying
    and they can't hear me either
    but I can hear the holy heartbeat abound
    above the sounds of our earthly battleground
    I can see the holy heartbeat abound
    in the trees silvered with moonlight
    yet there is no day and neither is there night
    the clock is ticking for each of us
    see the technologists wearing yellow gowns, gloves, and masks touching expression with great message. Beautiful poem.
    .

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(11/23/2019 10:07:00 PM)

    I am so pleased that you like this poem! ! !

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  • Jane Campion (7/15/2019 9:09:00 PM)

    Our poems are woven tapestries hung on life. This innovative poem need repeating.

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(8/11/2019 8:15:00 PM)

    I have been enjoying your poems as well, Jane!

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(8/11/2019 8:10:00 PM)

    Thank you so much for your encouragement, Jane. Encouragement makes the sun shine a whole lot brighter!

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  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (3/25/2019 4:00:00 PM)

    Your poen is very structurally attractive as well as meaningul. Thank you for sharing

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  • Glen KappyGlen Kappy (3/25/2019 10:07:00 AM)

    this may seem random, susan, but looking through my issa poems, i came on this—

    Here,
    I'm here—
    the snow falling.

    and i think, there, there, with your words falling, i see you.

    warmly,

    glen

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/25/2019 4:02:00 PM)

    Glen, Your poen is very structurally attractive as well as meaningul. Thank you for sharing

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (3/11/2019 5:13:00 AM)

    This patchwork quilt looks beautiful....and ingenious! You have indeed presented an emergency situation when one is about to breathe his last and the latest technology trying hard to sustain the departing life! The readers feel the tension and agony of this tightrope walk between life and death! The only sound heard aloud is the ticking of the clock and it falls jarring in the ears with some fearful portents! Masterfully created and a 10

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/11/2019 6:30:00 PM)

    WoW, Valsa! ! ! ! ! Do you write short stories as well as poems? ? ? ? If not, perhaps you should! ! ! ! Your prose in this comment was powerful, emotive, and unforgettable! ! ! Much more powerful than my poem! ! ! I give your comment a skyfull of starry-eyed 10's! ! ! ! ! ! Thank you, Valsa, so very much for reading and commenting in depth on my poems!

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (3/10/2019 7:21:00 PM)

    can one commit plagiarism against oneself? ?

    bri

    :)

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/11/2019 6:13:00 PM)

    hahahahahahaha- -oh! ! ! I am in need of money! ! ! ! I shall sue myself! ! ! ! ! :)

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (3/10/2019 7:20:00 PM)

    the patchwork worked for me. i did not have to totally feel i understood this in order to enjoy it.

    to MyPoemList.

    bri

    :)

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/11/2019 6:11:00 PM)

    Thank you smiley Bri- - by the way, do you ever put a frowning emoji on a poem? ? ? I am glad this patchwork thing works for you and you were able to enjoy it and thank you for pinning it on your fav list! ! !

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  • Rebecca NavarreRebecca Navarre (3/7/2019 8:32:00 PM)

    This is ever so deeply moving put together! ..
    Very powerful! .. With ever such sentiment and
    thought! .. Thank you ever so much for sharing
    this! .. Ever so very many definite
    10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ...........................+++++

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/9/2019 4:12:00 PM)

    Thank you! You're sure a ray of sunshine! ! ! Even when the starry-eyed 10's are being hung in the night sky!

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  • Yor NellaYor Nella (3/4/2019 1:18:00 PM)

    It's good to experiment. Sometimes it works and sometimes it does not. I found it interesting in the way that you presented the words on the screen. It made them more interesting to read and gave their juxtaposition added to their meaning

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/5/2019 12:19:00 AM)

    Thank you for digging deep into the construction. Yes, I think the shape of the poem on the page is a definite part of a poem!

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  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (2/28/2019 2:07:00 PM)

    Tom! ! ! I am so pleased to see your comment. I bow to your method- I just copied some lines from other works of mine- posted and unposted- and did shuffle a couple of lines around - and repeated some for a poetic effect- -and added a word here and there as bridges. My heart and mind are so frozen with the daily snow outside and inside. Knowing your talent, I bet your Dada poems soared! ! !

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  • tom billsborough (2/26/2019 2:16:00 AM)

    I once submitted a " Dada" poem. Half lines were cut up and placed into a bag. I drew these out and wrote them out in sequence. Br Edwards said the end product made more senses than most of the poems on PH! Yours is brilliant

    More of the same, , please

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  • tom billsborough (2/26/2019 2:13:00 AM)

    Hi Susan. I once did a Dada poem. I cut up half lines and put the in a bag and drew them out at random and wrote them out in the order they were drawn out. Bri Edwards said the end result was, ore intelligible than many poems on PH! It's great to experiment and yours is a brilliant example. Do more.

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    Susan Williams(2/28/2019 2:00:00 PM)

    Hi again, Tom! ! ! I see PH is at it again, but thank you for persevering until you got your comment over to me Yes, I loved this experiment and I look forward to more in the future! ! ! !

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  • Unnikrishnan E S (2/25/2019 11:50:00 PM)

    Hi Susan,
    I just wonder how immensely would you have enjoyed working this out! Drives me absolutely crazy to think that this is a patchwork. I wouldn’t even suspect! ! !

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/28/2019 1:43:00 PM)

    Oh! ! My friend, you know me well! ! ! Yes, I enjoyed working this - -it was like solving a puzzle, it was like finding a hidden message and fleshing it out. Thank you for enjoying this effort. You're such an encouraging member of PH! ! ! ! ! !

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  • Lyn PaulLyn Paul (2/25/2019 4:38:00 PM)

    The outcome has presented an intriguing poem. It would be a well read book.
    I have done the same with titles.
    Thank You

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    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/28/2019 1:10:00 PM)

    Thank you for reading this experiment. I think it is especially useful for those times we simply can't feel driven to write!

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