Lee Crowell

Rookie - 0 Points (06 14 1953 / Pocono Mountains)

* Learning Curve - Poem by Lee Crowell

yellow bus stroking the
curves
on a concrete highway

windows wide open grabbing air
for a field trip in an early May
heat blast

with very
short khakis spouting lean legs
the teacher's aide
led me down a stream along a shaded path

steeped in the backwoods element she
crouched barefoot in a pool
scooping crystal water with her cupped hands

what she couldn't get into her mouth spilled on
her nose and chin,
trickled down her chest
and I realized she was naked underneath that
half buttoned shirt
but I couldn't stop staring
while she lingered like a living sculpture with
droplets on her dark tipped mounds


Comments about * Learning Curve by Lee Crowell

  • Kranthi Pothineni (8/27/2009 1:00:00 AM)

    No clue what inspired you to right this. Flow was good with interesting title. (Report)Reply

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  • Obinna Eruchie (7/7/2009 1:01:00 PM)

    An interesting piece, erotic in the end. (Report)Reply

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  • Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (7/7/2009 8:14:00 AM)

    Actually Lee I hate bras too! Naked indeed, she had a perfectly good shirt on, that had a little bit of water spilled on it. Seriously, you have succeeded to impress me with your stunning new version
    of your poem. 10 again. Karin Anderson
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  • Kale Beaudry (7/6/2009 7:23:00 PM)

    Wow, incredible. Each line flowed with perfection right up to the conclusion. When I reached the end I realized you couldn't have written this poem any better.

    Learning curve indeed. A title true to its content... and I liked the seductive nuances that you used as adjectives. I'm favouriting. Thanks for sharing.
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  • Jasmin Whyte (7/6/2009 8:51:00 AM)

    lovely how the first lines of the poem 'yellow bus stroking the curves on a concrete highway' set the precendence for the rest of this sensitive and 'awakening' poem. A lovely gentle adolescent call to natures abundance (Report)Reply

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  • Ken E Hall (7/6/2009 6:11:00 AM)

    Welll written curve...but all I can say is every one and the cats mother has had an experience like that...even Lady Chatterly. Thanks for the read
    regards
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  • Indira Babbellapati (7/6/2009 4:58:00 AM)

    lessons in living... landmarks in adolscent experiences...? (Report)Reply

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  • Joseph Poewhit (7/6/2009 4:20:00 AM)

    Brings a reality to pubity, and awareness (Report)Reply

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  • Estrella Baldemosa (7/5/2009 11:17:00 PM)

    how young were you Lee? :) ...just curious :) well done! (Report)Reply

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  • I Am Charlie (7/5/2009 8:48:00 PM)

    It's good. Might agree with Alison on the topic of punctuation.
    Just a few commas somewhere. or a full stop after heat wave.
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  • Alison Cassidy (7/3/2009 2:13:00 AM)

    You have described your titillating learning curve with subtlety and finesse in this sweet poem about adolescence and desire. My only criticism is your lack of punctuation. Punctuation can be such a wonderful aid to comprehension and interpretation. You should try it sometime. Great poem though. Love, Allie x x x x (Report)Reply

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  • Dr Hitesh Sheth (7/1/2009 11:49:00 AM)

    Messageof poem is good to learn the lesson on the curves.......................a good write............. (Report)Reply

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  • Chitra - (7/1/2009 8:13:00 AM)

    the subtle hints of a blossoming romance well protrayed! (Report)Reply

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (7/1/2009 6:58:00 AM)

    intriguing moves to explore the elegance..well implied...but I think to be shy?
    ah..ah? .............10
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  • Ernestine NorthoverErnestine Northover (7/1/2009 6:00:00 AM)

    I think that this is very beautiful, discreet but sensual. Nice intermingling of subtle hints. I enjoyed the read, even at my age! ! ! ! ! ! !
    Love Ernestine XXX
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  • Deependra Kumar Jha (7/1/2009 5:08:00 AM)

    Interesting one! wonder why u said, shy? (Report)Reply

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  • Deborah CromerDeborah Cromer (7/1/2009 2:18:00 AM)

    You did a good job. It's well written and doesn't blurt things out. It leaves some mystery. Some guessing too. Not too much too fast. Nice work.DC (Report)Reply

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  • Akram Awadat (7/1/2009 12:54:00 AM)

    fantastic poem, well done
    thanks a lot
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  • Anjali Sinha (7/1/2009 12:49:00 AM)

    shy
    obviously not
    Lee does not sound so
    good write---
    (do read mine FLOWERS OF OF LOVE (haiku)
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  • C. P. SharmaC. P. Sharma (6/30/2009 11:15:00 PM)

    A cleverly articulated beautiful poem with meaningful title. Nature is a great teacher and our bodies have a lot to learn from it but with the civilized ego this curve has broght this process to a halt. Enjoyed this thought provoking poem. You are an acknowledged poet and thanks for sharing this great poetry.
    CP
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Poem Submitted: Monday, June 29, 2009

Poem Edited: Monday, July 13, 2009


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