Valsa George

Limerick- A Bubble Burst Within - Poem by Valsa George

On her, his rapt eyes began to explore
The pull of his sharp eyes, she couldn't ignore
Like rippling waves in a pond
Rose in her an electric bond
Nothing like this she has felt before!

Topic(s) of this poem: attraction, eyes, love

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Ten syllables each in lines 1,2 and 5 and seven syllables in lines 3 and 4

Comments about Limerick- A Bubble Burst Within by Valsa George

  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (3/18/2020 1:42:00 AM)

    Oh. my this is sooooooooooooooooooooo sweet and you handled your topic with such delicate lines. excellent excellent excellent! ! ! ! ! ! ! 10++++++++++++ (Report)Reply

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  • Anjandev Roy (10/13/2019 12:21:00 AM)

    Splendid piece. Thank u. anjandev roy. (Report)Reply

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  • Glen KappyGlen Kappy (9/7/2019 8:10:00 AM)

    Valsa, you’ve captured in this the spark, the magnetic charge, of infatuation that hopefully leads to something deeper and more permanent. -Glen (Report)Reply

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  • Geeta Radhakrishna MenonGeeta Radhakrishna Menon (8/20/2019 12:57:00 PM)

    Valsa, dear Poetess, this is a classic Limerick!
    The accuracy of the syllables, the perfect rhythm of the verse and above all, the content of the poem.
    A passionate bubble, indeed, bursting from within. A picture so attractive and apt.......10

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:10:00 PM)

    Thank you so much Geeta for your overall appreciation of the limerick!

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (8/19/2019 2:30:00 PM)

    to MyPoemList. and i love the title, text, and.................her chest! his eyes will soon be heading South, and perhaps hers will as well.

    line 7: good, very, but i'd reverse the order of " she has" to " has she" .



    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:08:00 PM)

    Your suggestion is quite good! Thanks a lot Bri for the honor!

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  • Aniruddha PathakAniruddha Pathak (8/17/2019 1:51:00 AM)

    Lovely, you have taken a limerick to another level.
    And what an apt picture!

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:11:00 PM)

    Somehow I came across an apt picture! Thank you Aniruddha sir!

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  • Mj Lemon (8/16/2019 12:32:00 PM)

    The exact, precise moment of attraction....You capture it perfectly, Valsa! (Report)Reply

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:13:00 PM)

    Yes, the spark of love, I have captured at the right moment! Thank you Lemon!

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  • Indira RenganathanIndira Renganathan (8/12/2019 9:02:00 AM)

    Yes, when eyes meet and match love blooms..indeed a lovely amusing limerick..thank you Valsa (Report)Reply

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:16:00 PM)

    Yes, love blooms first in the eyes and is then transferred into the heart and later into the whole being! You have said it right, Indiraji! Thank you!

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (8/11/2019 11:08:00 PM)

    Like rippling waves in a pond the communication was made very brilliantly with electric bond and eyes explored the beauty of perception of love and mutual understanding. You have trick-fully and beautifully presented this excellent Limerick poem....10 (Report)Reply

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:18:00 PM)

    Thanks a lot Kumaramani sir for your greatly appreciative comment!

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  • Spock The VeganSpock The Vegan (8/11/2019 9:54:00 PM)

    That's a good one, Valsa - -10. Nice picture too. I just posted one myself. (Report)Reply

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:20:00 PM)

    Thank you Spock the Vegan for your high rating!

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  • Jane Campion (8/11/2019 9:52:00 PM)

    A mutual attraction has a reaction. (Report)Reply

    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/20/2019 11:21:00 PM)

    Definitely.....! Here the attraction is mutual and it has produced a reaction! Thank you Jane!

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, August 11, 2019

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