Lonely Moon Poem by Sandra Feldman

Lonely Moon

Rating: 4.7


The Moon will shine,
Without your smile,
But no longer shall it be,
A Moon that shines for me,
Gone are the days,
When you'd just stay,
So close, smiling at me.

The Moon is cold,
So I am told,
And winter's here for me,
When love is gone,
There is no Sun,
The Moon is all I see.

Oh lonely Moon, my lonely Moon,
Poor orphan in the sky,
Detached from mother Earth,
Your barren surface has no life,
No hope, no love, no mirth.

Oh Moon alone,
Made out of stone,
Rotating in the sky,
A phantom ship,
No life to grip,
No tears to even cry,
No one can feel your loneliness,
As deeply as can I.

Lonely Moon
Saturday, October 18, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Susan Williams 13 April 2016

I am so intrigued about your use of the moon- -most people just leave it sailing through the night sky. You boarded the moon, you gave it life- an orphan of its Mother Earth, [that is so powerful].. I am in love with your closing stanza- - - -]Oh Moon alone, Made out of stone, Rotating in the sky, A phantom ship, No life to grip, No tears to even cry, No one can feel your loneliness, As deeply as can I........................................ This is excellent writing and as excellent a closure as any I have seen. Brilliant. Deserving of at least a 10. Has it ever been made Poem of the Day? It should be.

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Bernard F. Asuncion 19 September 2017

Such an awesome write worthy of a full vote, Congrats, Sandra.....10+++++

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Bernard F. Asuncion 19 September 2017

I've just added you to MY FRIENDS LIST👍👍👍

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Sandra Feldman 19 September 2017

Blown away by your comment and very grateful! . Thank you very much.

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Dee Corpolongo 14 April 2016

This here poem is so moving, and emotional...and I truly love it. I can relate to it perfectly too. Your descriptive feelings say it all. Beautiful poem!

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vicki christison 14 August 2024

I love the way you wrote about the moon being cold and distant. Most people idolize the moon and you spoke the truth.

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John Prophet 13 August 2024

Thank you for all your wonderful reviews

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John Prophet 13 August 2024

Bravo, wonderful write.

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Akhtar Jawad 20 April 2024

Moon is moon, it's sometimes tired of routine but rises again as crescent. Love may be dormant sometimes but it never dies. A nice poem from a very good poetess.

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Bill Cantrell 09 April 2024

Why do I find myself always coming back to this poem? Because it is one of the best poems ever written

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