Lonely Moon Poem by Sandra Feldman

Lonely Moon

Rating: 4.7


The Moon will shine,
Without your smile,
But no longer shall it be,
A Moon that shines for me,
Gone are the days,
When you'd just stay,
So close, smiling at me.

The Moon is cold,
So I am told,
And winter's here for me,
When love is gone,
There is no Sun,
The Moon is all I see.

Oh lonely Moon, my lonely Moon,
Poor orphan in the sky,
Detached from mother Earth,
Your barren surface has no life,
No hope, no love, no mirth.

Oh Moon alone,
Made out of stone,
Rotating in the sky,
A phantom ship,
No life to grip,
No tears to even cry,
No one can feel your loneliness,
As deeply as can I.

Lonely Moon
Saturday, October 18, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Susan Williams 13 April 2016

I am so intrigued about your use of the moon- -most people just leave it sailing through the night sky. You boarded the moon, you gave it life- an orphan of its Mother Earth, [that is so powerful].. I am in love with your closing stanza- - - -]Oh Moon alone, Made out of stone, Rotating in the sky, A phantom ship, No life to grip, No tears to even cry, No one can feel your loneliness, As deeply as can I........................................ This is excellent writing and as excellent a closure as any I have seen. Brilliant. Deserving of at least a 10. Has it ever been made Poem of the Day? It should be.

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Bernard F. Asuncion 19 September 2017

Such an awesome write worthy of a full vote, Congrats, Sandra.....10+++++

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Aufie Zophy 14 March 2023

One of the nicest poems, I 've read. So full of emotion, poetically expressed in a superb way

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Bill Cantrell 08 January 2023

Goodbye old friend, I leave you with several poem dedicated to you, may you find peace

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Smoky Hoss 05 November 2022

At this time in my life I find these words deeply, and sadly personal, the feeling, the knowing, are real. You've put the depth of a broken heart into words as well as anyone could hope to.

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Sandra Feldman 05 November 2022

Thank you very much! Sadness shared, I understand, dear friend.

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Sandra Feldman 05 November 2022

Very, very deeply moved and touched by your sincere and incomparable words.

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Sylvia Frances Chan 14 October 2022

FIVE Stars Gold, and myriad more.........TEN Pointsas of old.........and myriad more, encore!

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Sandra Feldman 21 October 2022

Thanks dear Sylvia, couldn't ask for more! You're generosity, I certainly adore.

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Bri Edwards 12 September 2022

Sandra, to cast off depression, just take some LSD at bedtime. I'm JUST KIDDING.

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