Freshness of love made me lively
To give up the life of solitude boldly
Year after year we loved happily
Hand in hand ever walked closely
Shockingly arose a whirlpool of strangers
Who wished to measure the worth of lovers.
I spiritedly climbed the hill in a second
And swam with the tides to far beyond
They uttered in chorus Great! Great!
But the final test to win was already set
Plucking away my root was only their trial
Implanting New Belief was their word final
Hearing that terrific crime I was taken aback
Inner voice cautioned me never look back!
This may be an earlier poem, but I feel it is wanting to expand more. The flow is fine, but I am sure there is more expression for what is a hard subject. Good work though.
Great and admirable desire...mindset that focus the emotional challenge of reality of what is in the present and visible...thank you for the sharing and God bless.... God bless a 10 +++++
Great piece of work; and this is part of the experiences of love. But, we have to keep the fire burning always; no matter how hard it is. Thank you for sharing it with us. E.K.L.
They uttered in chorus Great! Great! But the final test to win was already set Plucking away my root was only their trial Implanting New Belief was their word final.....swam with the tides a bit far..... plucking my root away. never look back. love this poem. love, experiences....... decisions..... thank you very much dear poetess. tony
'Hearing that terrific crime I was taken aback Inner voice cautioned me never look back! ' Such a nice finale to a well crafted poem.. Thank you :)
Love departed! ! But, there is much hope in life. Nice work.
Very nice penning, in fact true love is always threatened, it is envied mostly.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
An interesting poem dear friend, I try to read it again and again, am not very sure to understand the end. To me it sounded like such a happy time you had with your loved one than others came admired you and wanted to add beside that sweet love, something that made you run and cry.. I seem to feel quite strange the lines: They uttered in chorus Great! Great! But the final test to win was already set Plucking away my root was only their trial Implanting New Belief was their word final to me, sounds like a scene the from a tv studio..it does let you think that you have the chance of a choice, than takes from you with the both hands..