In the mystical dark despair
Tight lips in a frozen prayer
Upset for what happened unfair
I saw her in a state rare
'What’s the problem? ' I urged to share
She screamed ‘it’s none of your affair’
In the moment beyond compare
I tried to unfold the hidden layer
'He broke my heart' she did stare
I want to die, but does he care?
He looks so peaceful lying there
But doesn’t realize my pain bare
I said 'living here is a difficult dare'
But, committing suicide is a selfish fare
Love and happiness are seldom in pair
No one gets everything in life, beware
Life's philosophy...well captured through poetic expressions, resonant in tone
A very good rhythmetic poem, with good structure and flow. I enjoyed the read and congratulations on a good write. Lynn
I too enjoy the way you work with a conversation in this poem. Life is often a difficult road to tread and it is well defined in your poem. Great work1 10 love Karin
very good practical advice Deepen...well composed poem...you maintain the rythm through out...10
Life is a journey we all have to follow, at times the path is easy, but it can get very difficult as well. How we deal with the difficulties is the test life gives to us. If we overcome them the path can get easier still. Your friends act was selfish, but compassion must be shown for his deep unhappiness. A well written poem keep it up.
Nice choices of words to rhyme. You were able to choose the right words to rhyme and still convey your message. Well written out. Pretty tricky to do and you did a very nice job. DC
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
a nice poem to be shared, i like the last part: No one gets everything in life, . makes me have a new look at this life. th