In the mystical dark despair
Tight lips in a frozen prayer
Upset for what happened unfair
I saw her in a state rare
'What’s the problem? ' I urged to share
She screamed ‘it’s none of your affair’
In the moment beyond compare
I tried to unfold the hidden layer
'He broke my heart' she did stare
I want to die, but does he care?
He looks so peaceful lying there
But doesn’t realize my pain bare
I said 'living here is a difficult dare'
But, committing suicide is a selfish fare
Love and happiness are seldom in pair
No one gets everything in life, beware
This is the best conversation poem I've read usally these don't work for me but I do like this one 10
a wonderful logic about life and death...it goes with its essential ingredients of love.. reasonable write of events...nice poem....10
Love and happiness are seldom in pair No one gets everything in life, beware yes that true, well write dear
very good practical advice Deepen...well composed poem...you maintain the rythm through out...10
Life is a journey we all have to follow, at times the path is easy, but it can get very difficult as well. How we deal with the difficulties is the test life gives to us. If we overcome them the path can get easier still. Your friends act was selfish, but compassion must be shown for his deep unhappiness. A well written poem keep it up.
Nice choices of words to rhyme. You were able to choose the right words to rhyme and still convey your message. Well written out. Pretty tricky to do and you did a very nice job. DC
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Quite dramatic and very well expressed. In life we ought to do mistakes, in love, career or anything. Death is not the solution to life's problems.