Rema Prasanaa


! Monsoon! ! - Poem by Rema Prasanaa

Rain on my dreams, Monsoon
black clouds...
rain on my ornamental feathers
shower on my pure earth
on my pleasant dawns,
my passionate oceans, mountains
deep meadows and all over my
marigolds, campanulas
on days petals chisel like
black stone, carve a deity
for me to worship
while you play cancans, I sit in
my chamber and play mandolin
give me plectrums to pluck strings
from your drizzle source
my song birds, clouds
you chased out, I nest
them in my heart’s comfort
faded sun rays I fill in cauldrons
to subside your hunger
rain, terrorize black clouds
and shower all over me
I like your melancholic rhythm






© Rema Prasanna
July 31,2008


Comments about ! Monsoon! ! by Rema Prasanaa

  • (8/13/2008 5:14:00 AM)

    rain has this quality of influencing each in a unique way...i translated a short story on rain...it simply haunts... (Report)Reply

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  • (8/13/2008 4:22:00 AM)

    I love the rain, superb. (Report)Reply

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  • Kesav Easwaran (8/11/2008 11:21:00 AM)

    what chases your song birds forcing you to nest them in? rain or black clouds? rain doesn't fit there that good, for rain is welcome to you, you want to shower in it...or is that you prefer here not to see your song birds drenched? bit confusing...
    the poem addresses rain...so 'you chase' means 'rain chases'... i would prefer 'your black shadows chase' or some thing like that... a poem otherwise well worded well written...despite this the poem, ten grade...
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  • Dr.subhendu Kar (8/9/2008 8:02:00 AM)

    yet beautiful flow of words by the imagery of nature making all symmetrical and scintillating with little confusion of black clouds again, the monsoon when cuddles the drems, unique expression of ingenuity, well penned, thanks for sharing (Report)Reply

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  • (8/8/2008 5:30:00 PM)

    Very well-expressed. The imagery speaks to the reader. Thanks. (Report)Reply

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  • Indira Renganathan (8/8/2008 8:43:00 AM)

    A poetic rain.Well done Rema.10 (Report)Reply

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  • (8/7/2008 11:24:00 PM)

    A shower of unique but cannily mixed metaphors spreads delight throughout this piece. A metaphoric feast in monsoonal munificence! Rgds, Ivan (Report)Reply

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  • (8/6/2008 3:45:00 AM)

    Wonderful poem Rema, sounds like my home, always dark clouds and rain... Andrew 10 (Report)Reply

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  • Dr.subhendu Kar (8/3/2008 10:58:00 PM)

    really wonderful poem by the monsoon yet of unique genre rain razzling on the dream, heart revels by the pure earth, yet mystque rain when respires, well penned,10+, thanks for sharing (Report)Reply

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  • (8/3/2008 3:11:00 PM)

    If i may copy a line from your poem I like your melancholic rhythm of this poem...nice work! (Report)Reply

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  • (8/2/2008 3:28:00 PM)

    I remember awaiting the monsoons eagerly to gain relief from heoppressive lead up tp them.Your writing brought back many memories of the years I spent in Malaya as ayoung man. I too liked the drumming of the rin on rooftops like an excited heart beat (Report)Reply

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  • Sathyanarayana M V S (8/2/2008 10:09:00 AM)

    Wow! mesmerising! I felt marigolds, mountains and greens in my room. Heartfelt 10 (Report)Reply

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  • (8/2/2008 6:03:00 AM)

    anothor gem of a write from your creative corner (Report)Reply

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  • Saint Cynosure (8/1/2008 3:21:00 PM)

    Rema, this is really awesome. (Report)Reply

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  • (8/1/2008 11:08:00 AM)

    I like the imageries that you pursue one to have in their mind, theyre really great.
    If you have time please read some of my work too and rate it and/or comment it.
    Constructive criticism is welcome as well, offcourse.
    Thankyou and keep it up,
    Kilian
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  • (8/1/2008 2:58:00 AM)

    i find monsoons have a special magic of their own, and like Indira says, its melancholic when it brings floods and causes havoc. a beautiful composition, with lovely evocative images.10+
    Please read magic of monsoons and monsoon magic when time permits
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  • Ramesh T A (8/1/2008 2:26:00 AM)

    Without this regular melancholic rhythm from the Sky where can anyone enjoy mirthfulness in the bosom of mother Earth? Wonderful timely Nature poem! (Report)Reply

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  • Indira Renganathan (7/31/2008 11:48:00 PM)

    Rain is melodious, harmonious.Its meloncholic pattern is only when it pours in thunderbolt and floods.But even then there's a pleasing rhythm to the musical ears. Good write. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, July 31, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, August 25, 2008


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