Mother Poem by Mohammad Muzzammil
Mother
At first I opened my eyes and found,
A smiling, attractive and beautiful face,
Seeing her I paused my crying sound,
And began to flow on love's surface.
She empowered my body that was mild,
And for me careful by day and night,
Being suffered yet she for me smiled,
And bestowed me pleasure in every plight.
The latest and sweetest gift from heaven,
The idol of love and figure of mercy,
Like a kindness plant, flowers laden,
Whose fragrance has bestowed me decency.
I love paradise and wish to achieve,
And appreciate it more than any other,
Cause it is said and as I believe,
Paradise touches the feet of my mother.
It is a very nice piece about your mother....your similes are good. Your alternate end-rhyming/rhyme scheme is well done and quite pleasant. You might want to make your metre more consistent...same number of syllables as well as accents. I like it very well. You did a fine job.
This is a really nice piece of writing Mohammad. The expressions are so pure...it reflects through! :)
Straight from the heart, touching your readers in a very special way. I think this poem about mother is one of the really good ones that I have read. I especially love the end. Wise words full of feeling.
Nice word's Mohammad, they express great love and respect for your mother.Well done.
Mother is that canopy strong but gentle to shield danger n’ build compassion great tribute enjoyed fully … thanks sharing Hon’ble Poet Mohammad-ji Regards Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10
Yes, this is a very nice piece of writing......telling us our heaven is under our mother's feet and this is a Hadit you have very well expressed in your poem........It is giving us a message.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/26/2024 5:07:03 PM # 1.0.0.1119
A nice piece of art that is rich in expression as well as rhyme. It reminds me my childhood.