Moving On... Poem by Nosheen Irfan

Hi Nosheen, Fantastic Poem. Very profound. The night falls swift at the turning, splitting our feet Where you left, - Separation causes a mental stress beyond description.. And your days are less attractive... the moon shines less The place is bleak, marked in black And, but we have moved on each in our own space striding ahead, but not without an occasional glance over the shoulder.- Beautifully written. Very profound lines. Affects the way one's heart beats...10++

Yeah, I look over my shoulder all the time. Nicely written Nosheen.

A bittersweet break-up. No angry gestures or mean words. A quiet but definite turning away and then walking in opposite directions. But the emotional impact of this break-up is conveyed by the details of nature: moonlight id diminished, the glory of night is now bleak and black. I can feel the depth of sorrow in those details, but you don't say a word. Except for the occasional look backward, you are moving swiftly into your New Life. (BTW I saw your comment on Valsa George's 700th poem - very insightful and supportive comment. But what a surprisingly passionate poem! ! What will you write for your #700? I have no idea at all about my distant #700..)

The place is bleak, marked in black - - - - - - - - - - -The sadness felt after the heart break expressed profoundly in few words- - - Life moves on but sweet memories of past occasionally comeback to us.To quote from the poem- - 'but we have moved on each in our own space striding ahead with an occasional glance over the shoulder.'

The place is bleak, marked in black but we have moved on each in our own space striding ahead.....I totally agree with you.

This is a very objective poem in that it describes external actions precisely but doesn't interpret them or reveal emotions. Two people agree to depart and go their separate ways. Only the glances OVER THE SHOULDER reveal the emotional cost of this MOVING ON. Your poem is an honest slice of real life. It makes me neither sad nor glad. But I understand such break-ups are inevitable.

The place is bleak! ! Thanks for sharing.

What a juxtaposition to your Valentine's poem. I hope this came before. Well written...it gives an image to the feeling of separating, breaking apart. Well done.

yes, you are right. I like how you ended the poem, that is how we move on..