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November Love (My First Poem) (Two Versions) - Poem by GREENWOLFE 1962

Below, you will see two versions of my very first poem.
Its important to understand that the first version of the poem
is exactly as I wrote it at 6: 15 to 6: 30 PM on November 2nd
1970. I made no changes to it. It is also important to know
that this was, in fact, my first ever attempt to write a poem
of any kind whatsoever. The second version is modified from
the first because I wanted to demonstrate how a few simple
word changes can convert a rather average poem of some
quality into a poem of great quality and structure.

In early November the air is clear
With many sounds of lovers near.
Not as the April birds that sing
Nor as the Sunday church bells ring.
But rather to the rhythm of rain,
The hearts of lovers beat again.
For it's not true love that blooms in spring
Nor is it of love that birds do sing.
Rather of that love soon gone
And never seems to carry on.
That April love that all partake,
But very few ever make.
It's all year long this false love swells
Till in November true love dwells.

In November the air is clear
With many sounds of lovers near.
Not as the April birds that sing
Nor as the Sunday church bells ring.
Rather to the rhythm of rain,
The hearts of lovers beat again.
It's not true love that blooms in spring.
Nor is it love, that birds will sing.
But rather of that love soon gone
Which never seems to carry on.
That April love that all partake
And very few will ever make.
It's all year long this false love swells
Till in November, true love dwells.

I have removed the voting option on this poem
and placed it in my Hall Of Fame, due to its
history described above and its usefulness as
an example to the readers.

Comments about November Love (My First Poem) (Two Versions) by GREENWOLFE 1962

  • (7/13/2010 12:55:00 PM)

    A full bodied, beautiful poem! Brilliantly expressed and so well embroided poetically. Lovely; D (Report) Reply

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  • (6/8/2009 4:52:00 PM)

    such words from someone that has never written before means the person is a natural poet. which you, my dear, are. your words always expressed so elegantly. (Report) Reply

  • Miriam Maia Padua (11/28/2008 10:51:00 PM)

    obviously you are a born poet sir...born to be great...1970's piece.? great....a collector's item...while reading this, .i feel i exist already during that time or I'm in a time machine.......admire for keeping your composition til this time...a poet by mind and heart to keep its compositions til the end of the poet should be? ...thanks sir for sharing this to us...November love (its November) ..... (Report) Reply

  • (10/13/2008 8:40:00 AM)

    this is what makes you a great poet sir.......there is nothing more to say...! ! (Report) Reply

  • (9/16/2008 5:57:00 PM)

    There are two things that make a great poet: how the poet inspires the reader and in admiration if I could say 'I wish had written that poem'.Wonderful**********************~> (Report) Reply

  • (8/30/2008 8:03:00 PM)

    This poem is a fine example of why it is great to keep our written works. Just as we are always changing and growing, those experiences translate in our poetry. Great write then and now! (Report) Reply

  • (8/19/2008 6:28:00 PM)

    hi i love the november love poems not only does it speak truth but novembers one of my fav month andits my birth month (Report) Reply

  • Ernestine Northover (7/21/2008 9:04:00 AM)

    A very good start to your interest in poetry Greenwolfe, you obviously had the talent already, and all you needed was to put your pen to paper. Congratulations on this one, could be no better. Terrific.
    Love and hugs Ernestine XXX
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  • (7/19/2008 8:01:00 PM)

    Im still an amature so i kinda prefer the first version of it but still 10! (Report) Reply

  • Ershad Mazumder (6/29/2008 11:55:00 AM)

    Let the time say, Green is a real poetic talent. Poetry has no frontier.It is beyond this planet.It is beyond galaxy and cosmos.Poets must live in future. (Report) Reply

  • (6/27/2008 9:34:00 AM)

    Very light, warm, and refreshing it felt like I was actually their which means you are a great writer, if you can take your reader to diffrent places Well done! (Report) Reply

  • (6/20/2008 2:22:00 PM)

    When im finished commenting on your work im going to favorite your poems (Report) Reply

  • Heaven Ludy (6/9/2008 6:28:00 PM)

    Wow! i seriously adore your writing...I can seriously learn from you. (Report) Reply

  • (6/4/2008 11:37:00 PM)

    Wow, Greenwolfe, wow. It truly has inspired me to pen my thought in verse. I never thought it would be so easy. But since it came right from your heart so it looks so easy. Anyway, in my case whether I fall in love in April or November it won't last long, ha ha aha. But your poem is fantastic. Now I am getting emotional thinking of my first love that failed. It still hurts. Where is my handkerchief? ? ? Take care. Cya. Keep smiling. (Report) Reply

  • (5/20/2008 4:11:00 PM)

    These days Poetry written in iambic tetrameter is rare, but here you will find fine examples of strong traditional rhythm and metre. November Love shows how a poet develops an 'ear' in his writing. Rgds, Ivan (Report) Reply

  • (5/15/2008 3:35:00 AM)

    the motion is fluid, the message is ripe; it makes me want to believe that this love does exist. the power lies in its rhythm which exposes the core of an almost alternate reality to the truths of love. whether young or old, we can all visualise such an experience; and the imagery makes it so. (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2008 7:03:00 PM)

    hey great made me think but overall better than mine kool bye then (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2008 2:12:00 AM)

    Its wonderful how you have put the poem into context of its past and how it stands in your mind as an important write. Its also wonderful how a reader can see the comparative of both old and new and see slight adjustments can make a poem to become a great poem. Your ability to write and form in the second verse does succeed to convey its message much better.

    Thank you,
    (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2008 12:26:00 AM)

    I actually quite enjoyed reading this. It is a very sweet poem- a sad bit in it about the falsity of some relationships- but it is very beautiful. I understand it, which makes it all the more well liked. Excellent job *smiles* (Report) Reply

  • (5/12/2008 2:19:00 AM)

    Excellent poem Greenwolfe both versions of the poem are quite good a 10 out of 10 here excellent work as per usual (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, April 6, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, November 14, 2010

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