Blazing red
Ascetic saffron
Appeal to me
In same tone
Radical cannons
Vedic canons
Sound to me
In same tune
Rishi Marx
Rebel Manu
Seem to me
Right addresses
Take my route
Learn the truth
(Manu was a great exponent of Vedas. He wrote Manu Smrithi
a codified Hindu law based on Vedic tenets)
BY sathya narayana
dt: 11-11-2008
I like the format of this poem. Unfortunately I am not familiar with most of the content; consequently, it does not mean much to me. I think it would be an effective poem for those who are. However, it does tell me something about you the poet-person.
Still some more lines needed to make impact on readers.Personally i don't like Manu and i wrote in telugu stree vada kavita 'manuvu kalam nundi tanuvu daasyam lone'.Good attempt.Sir you have not passed comments on my poem; Politicians-satire'
Rather good, I've read this style before, you did I good job. I don't have must experience as a critic so there.
I wish I could say more than it is a beautiful poem.I am not familiarize with its content.Sorry Dear Sathya Narayana! I am Brazilian! Best wishes Karla Bardanza
Simple and rythm is and sounds bold! Well written, I like it and give 10+++
STriking differences well brought out here. U get 10++...........
This is simply a wow... simple but so deep... More I read from you, more I love poetry...10 ++++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
good flow smooth poetry--- but red and saffron no longer appeal me as in their name lots of attrocieties happen in India.--So right now for me its BEWARE red ---saffron---beware. regards anju