A big smile, beautiful face
Straight hair, shining black
Perfect figure, enthusiastic words
Can't hide your ache...
Huge money, big bungalows
Dozen cars, all royals
Pretty clothes, priceless ornaments
Can't make your soul glow...
how truthfully you show but they seem to alone glow cars rides show well done to you also in poetry you alone will GLOW
I'm not poor and then also not gay..... It defines your beauty and wealth can't hide your sorrows....
Pretty clothes, priceless ornaments Can't make your soul glow... Such a great truth dear Naila. tony
Very true, Naila Rais, but the so-called civil we always hide feelings and wear masks. A lovely poem, full marks.
I too like correction only if it's true, the original arrangement of can't make you glow works just fine. Just like the light shining it already applies itself to the inner being or soul. Of course it's my opinion just the same as the correction was Bri Edwards. Very nice poem 10+
very well written miss naila.....we need purity in our soul... nothing else matters...great job....a big 10...keep it up
(cont.) **i don't need to know your answer, but if you want me to know, send a message, as i rarely return to a poem page after i finish commenting. Can't make you glow... your meaning is NOT CLEAR, with these words. how about Can't make your soul (or personality) glow? ? bri ;)
Kkk, , I'll make it soul glow....thnx for pointing out errors..... Correction is always welcomed.... Naila
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Can't make you glow... in one verse at the last you tell it all. a great philosophy of love and innocence and simplicity.. tony
Thanks! ! ! Naila