Geetha Jayakumar

Gold Star - 16,714 Points (Kerala Palakkad)

Rings Of Smoke! - Poem by Geetha Jayakumar

Often he played with
Circles of smoke
He loved making circles
With the puff of cigarette.
A chain smoker, he was,
He lit another one,
Before one got over.
All warned him to stay away
But it fell on his deaf ears.
Finally, he choked his heart
Now lay as good as dead
On the bed of smokes
He puffed everyone's words in
Rings of smoke.

© 2014.

Geetha Jayakumar.

Topic(s) of this poem: life and death, smoking

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Purely my imagination.

Comments about Rings Of Smoke! by Geetha Jayakumar

  • Heather Wilkins (10/12/2013 8:51:00 PM)

    a good poem about smoke. going up in the rings of smoke not good 10 (Report) Reply

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  • (9/27/2013 7:17:00 AM)

    Hi Geetha,
    Kindly go through my poem as per the link given below:
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    My experience while I was a student during 1961 -69 in Kasturba Medical College, Manipal and Mangalore. I have friends like Dr.C.R.Ramaramy and Dr.Hebbar in Palakkad.
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  • Krishnakumar Chandrasekar Nair (9/26/2013 9:42:00 AM)

    So many lives go up in smoke
    Because they lack the will to say no
    Nicotine their nectar and coke
    Till its too late to stop or go slow
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  • Anil Kumar Panda (9/22/2013 11:05:00 AM)

    each ring serves as a noose around his neck.nice message. (Report) Reply

  • Poetheart Morgan (9/22/2013 8:54:00 AM)

    You are good Poetess very good! ! ! ! Loved this one! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (9/21/2013 7:23:00 AM)

    Nice warning to all who smoke. Let life be not blown away as smoke rings. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Kavya . (9/20/2013 5:06:00 AM)

    a good one with an important message to chain smokers who puff smoke in the air for enjoyment, later find themselves on bed with a sense of predicament! (Report) Reply

  • (9/19/2013 11:06:00 AM)

    interesting one Geetha
    i love your way to tell this poem, especially how you put the message behind your words
    nice one
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  • (9/19/2013 10:21:00 AM)

    Nice alarming poem for smokers. (Report) Reply

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (9/19/2013 8:59:00 AM)

    Smoke ring life covered by smoke 'the death' (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (9/19/2013 6:50:00 AM)

    Geetha, when warned this way, definitely it will have greater impact than writing a treatise on the evils of smoking!
    A good job!
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 19, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, May 29, 2017

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