Geetha Jayakumar

Gold Star - 13,411 Points (Kerala Palakkad)

Rings Of Smoke! - Poem by Geetha Jayakumar

He played with circle of smokes.
Loved making as many as circles
With the
Puff of cigarette.
A chain smoker
Made a chain of rings
With the harmful smoke.
He played with the cigarettes
One after another,
Before one get puffed
Another one lighted it.
All warned him
Stay away from it
With an heart attack
He lay on bed like a half dead smoke.
He puffed everyones words
Into the rings of smoke.

© 2014.

Geetha Jayakumar.

Topic(s) of this poem: smoking

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Purely my imagination.

Comments about Rings Of Smoke! by Geetha Jayakumar

  • Heather Wilkins (10/12/2013 8:51:00 PM)

    a good poem about smoke. going up in the rings of smoke not good 10 (Report) Reply

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  • (9/27/2013 7:17:00 AM)

    Hi Geetha,
    Kindly go through my poem as per the link given below:
    http: //
    My experience while I was a student during 1961 -69 in Kasturba Medical College, Manipal and Mangalore. I have friends like Dr.C.R.Ramaramy and Dr.Hebbar in Palakkad.
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  • Krishnakumar Chandrasekar Nair (9/26/2013 9:42:00 AM)

    So many lives go up in smoke
    Because they lack the will to say no
    Nicotine their nectar and coke
    Till its too late to stop or go slow
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  • Anil Kumar Panda (9/22/2013 11:05:00 AM)

    each ring serves as a noose around his neck.nice message. (Report) Reply

  • Poetheart Morgan (9/22/2013 8:54:00 AM)

    You are good Poetess very good! ! ! ! Loved this one! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (9/21/2013 7:23:00 AM)

    Nice warning to all who smoke. Let life be not blown away as smoke rings. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Kavya . (9/20/2013 5:06:00 AM)

    a good one with an important message to chain smokers who puff smoke in the air for enjoyment, later find themselves on bed with a sense of predicament! (Report) Reply

  • (9/19/2013 11:06:00 AM)

    interesting one Geetha
    i love your way to tell this poem, especially how you put the message behind your words
    nice one
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  • (9/19/2013 10:21:00 AM)

    Nice alarming poem for smokers. (Report) Reply

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (9/19/2013 8:59:00 AM)

    Smoke ring life covered by smoke 'the death' (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (9/19/2013 6:50:00 AM)

    Geetha, when warned this way, definitely it will have greater impact than writing a treatise on the evils of smoking!
    A good job!
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 19, 2013

Poem Edited: Sunday, November 2, 2014

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