inhale a moment
hold it and it holds your breath
till you’ll meet your death
inhale a moment hold it and it holds your breath till you’ll meet your death.........nice poetic expression. Beautiful haiku.
The compression of words in the senryu makes the impact all the greater. And the ambiguity of words: the first IT refers to breath, the second could refer to breath or romantic love. It it's breath, the poem cites physical death; if it's romantic love, other meanings abound, my favorite being the love has transformed his/her life in something totally NEW and WONDERFUL. The poem likemit's subject is one deep breath and ehale, but so much happens in that moment!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Wow extraordinary and innovative, ! Nice to read a senryu. Thumbs up. Great to read frm u again.