Asif Baloch

Freshman - 650 Points (06-06-1978 / karachi)

Room Of Gloom - Poem by Asif Baloch

I laugh when they laugh
I sing to kill my feelings
A smile with so much tears
Drizzle like rain silently
Inside

I want but I can’t get
A love which did forfeit
Left me on the venomous thorns
To glide

Once injuries now become scars
Left by painful thoughts
Thoughts of loneliness
And no one by
My side

Giggles and laughs in the air
Echos and explodes in my head
Tearing and ripping my soul a part
Forcing me on the flames
To ride

There is someone at the door
Trying to open and enter the gloom
Room of gloom where I hide
Covering my face and
Silently cry


Comments about Room Of Gloom by Asif Baloch

  • Gargi Saha (10/18/2008 5:37:00 AM)

    A sorrowfully realistic poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Ashraful MusaddeqAshraful Musaddeq (10/17/2008 9:16:00 PM)

    Is the room of gloom waiting there?
    Are we going to enter?
    Lovely and touchy composition.
    10 from me.
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  • Kesav EaswaranKesav Easwaran (10/17/2008 7:45:00 AM)

    open your gloomy room out, Aijaz...much fresh air and dazzling light waiting there to enter...A well written poem on frustrating lonely feels...10 (Report)Reply

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  • Asef Fakih (10/16/2008 12:08:00 PM)

    Nice one, lot of feelings, lot of pain, beautiful poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Sarwar ChowdhurySarwar Chowdhury (10/16/2008 9:28:00 AM)

    Eloquent.....painfully beautiful........and thoughtful indeed.......10+ (Report)Reply

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  • Anjali Sinha (10/15/2008 11:20:00 PM)

    good theres someone at the door
    Trying to open and enter the gloom---
    Dont cover your face
    dont silently cry
    for if u do
    therll be no more lovely
    poems from you
    love anjali
    +10
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  • Emo Seb (10/15/2008 4:34:00 PM)

    wow....amazing. dark, deep, all together a masterpiece
    Seb
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  • Dr.Wardha Jawdat (10/15/2008 5:34:00 AM)

    very very heartfelt...almost as if you were indeed sad when you penned this piece...this one really seems to have come from a lonely heart....do try your pen at something like a soft romantic scene between a young couple.still in the phase of unprofessed love...i have a feeling youll do marvellously... best wishes aijaz...i enjoy reading your poems. (Report)Reply

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  • Seema Chowdhury (10/14/2008 9:05:00 PM)

    who said you are all alone. you have so many friends on poemhunter website. pl share your grief and pain and let it all pour out. then you'll feel fresh and brite and will start anew. (Report)Reply

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  • Sarah AbdullahSarah Abdullah (10/14/2008 2:44:00 PM)

    Roads of noise and madness.... outside
    Halls of loneliness...Inside
    Where every one is holding a candle..
    and Dirt covering their eyes

    Such a great poem....
    Loved how it explains the inner Side of ourselves
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  • Chitra - (10/14/2008 10:51:00 AM)

    this fine piece actually teleported me to the inner acquifer...filled with emotional brine (Report)Reply

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (10/14/2008 8:18:00 AM)

    deep thoughts...let see..it implied like this..

    lonely as can be
    lets hide not to see
    inert feeling to beguile
    smile for a while

    Ency Bearis
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  • Sathyanarayana M V SSathyanarayana M V S (10/14/2008 7:46:00 AM)

    Asif Bhayya, this poem has great depths, the right tone, apt words and created successfully the required mood......terrific.....10 (Report)Reply

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  • Marvin Brato (10/12/2008 11:18:00 PM)

    Classic poem, depicts the loneliness in every one; a gloom behinds those smiles. Maybe by letting someone enters into our room of gloom, the darkness will turn into light and happiness will be found! A 10. (Report)Reply

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  • Asif AndalibAsif Andalib (10/10/2008 10:49:00 AM)

    Wonderful craft of writing! So sad poem of loneliness! 10 for this piece. (Report)Reply

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  • Reshma Ramesh (10/10/2008 12:18:00 AM)

    so much sadness......god bless you...well penned (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, October 9, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, May 3, 2010


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