Tareq Jalabi

Search For Freedom

i feel so happy
being by your side
whenever near you
my smile i couldn`t hide
***
swimming away from you
i many times tried
but always to you
pulls me the tide
***
once the whole ocean
i completely dried
it didn`t work
coz to you i was tied
***
another on awave
i took a ride
thinking somewhere else
it will me guide
***
but drove me to you
with a gentle slide
i was shocked
and my mouth open wide
***
i kept holding on
till some glide
took me away
and i accordingly died

Poem Submitted: Friday, September 11, 2009
Poem Edited: Monday, June 20, 2011

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  • Medusa WavesMedusa Waves (10/12/2009 12:46:00 PM)

    its was so beautiful :)
    i really liked it-i hope you get to make more as you grow and flourish
    Regards,
    Afrodita

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  • Jo E (10/8/2009 8:09:00 AM)

    I like it! :) Keep it up! Your good.. :)
    Sorry it took me a while, havent been on for a long time.. :)

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  • Kathleen Hintz (9/24/2009 9:18:00 AM)

    i really liked this poem but a lil type for you is not to try so hard to make everything flow because then it doesnt sound as good if you just write how you feel and what you want then rough draft it make little changes then you will have something grande..

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  • Catrina Heart (9/23/2009 7:28:00 AM)

    Destiny's game our fate lies......lovely vivid piece with fine rhymes........10

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  • Roxy Gonro (9/21/2009 6:25:00 PM)

    It really shows how destiny finds a way. i love it

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  • Heather Owens (9/20/2009 4:02:00 PM)

    Loved the beat, like a heart. Fits perfectly with the words!

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  • darkpuppet loveless (9/18/2009 7:43:00 PM)

    omg, woah, it was amazing! a whole plethera of emotions that i understand a little to well,10/10 ^^

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  • Maya Hershey (9/17/2009 6:01:00 PM)

    This Poem... Is Extraordinary! I Loved It! ! .. So Amazing! .. Touching! ... The Feelings are Moving.. Wonderful 10+!
    Maya.

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  • Rehab Helmy (9/16/2009 10:33:00 PM)

    a very good one. I liked every line and description you draw.
    keep it up.

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  • Ashley Fortin (9/16/2009 10:02:00 PM)

    Nice poem, It's really a deeply described poem, and it does tell the reader what you feel without treding too deep. Wonderful poem!

    C.C.M

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  • Sameera Sameer (9/16/2009 1:02:00 PM)

    beautiful, wonderful, amazing, touching, fantastic, &&&&..............

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  • Angelica Ayman (9/16/2009 10:43:00 AM)

    great poem, , , , , like it so much
    voted 10++
    thx for charring

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  • Evaughn GrayEvaughn Gray (9/15/2009 11:23:00 PM)

    Very unique poem you have written here. I love everything about it. ~ Hazel G.E

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  • Saane Pahulu (9/15/2009 10:39:00 PM)

    really beautiful 10++++++++++

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  • Beatriz Luna (9/15/2009 8:41:00 PM)

    I can really tell what you wanted to say about freedom. That we're all loking for it. very nice and also liked the rhyme

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  • Erin Ford (9/15/2009 8:26:00 PM)

    your poem made my day a little better.it shows us how we all should search for freedom.

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  • Emu Getachew (9/15/2009 6:09:00 PM)

    Freedom is an attire to humanity…many has died for it and will continue to die for it. thank you...

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  • Ro'ya Abdulaal (9/15/2009 1:07:00 PM)

    Well written, your tone is so convincing, the words naturally rhyme and they smoothly flow. Absolute simplicity is your way to achieve perfection. Well done once again.

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  • Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (9/15/2009 8:30:00 AM)

    I think the theme of the sea worked well for you Blue Eyes. Nice rhythm and rhyme as well.
    Well done! Karin

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  • Michelle Kafka (9/14/2009 5:03:00 PM)

    Nice rhythm to the poem and well expressed. Thanks for sharing.

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