i feel so happy
being by your side
whenever near you
my smile i couldn`t hide
***
swimming away from you
i many times tried
but always to you
pulls me the tide
***
once the whole ocean
i completely dried
it didn`t work
coz to you i was tied
***
another on awave
i took a ride
thinking somewhere else
it will me guide
***
but drove me to you
with a gentle slide
i was shocked
and my mouth open wide
***
i kept holding on
till some glide
took me away
and i accordingly died
This Poem... Is Extraordinary! I Loved It! ! .. So Amazing! .. Touching! ... The Feelings are Moving.. Wonderful 10+! Maya.
a very good one. I liked every line and description you draw. keep it up.
Nice poem, It's really a deeply described poem, and it does tell the reader what you feel without treding too deep. Wonderful poem! C.C.M
beautiful, wonderful, amazing, touching, fantastic, &&&&..............
its was so beautiful :) i really liked it-i hope you get to make more as you grow and flourish Regards, Afrodita
I like it! :) Keep it up! Your good.. :) Sorry it took me a while, havent been on for a long time.. :)
i really liked this poem but a lil type for you is not to try so hard to make everything flow because then it doesnt sound as good if you just write how you feel and what you want then rough draft it make little changes then you will have something grande..
Destiny's game our fate lies......lovely vivid piece with fine rhymes........10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Loved the beat, like a heart. Fits perfectly with the words!