She Poem by Tareq Jalabi

She

Rating: 4.1


I`ve never cried
until she died
lying in bed
rolling from side to side
closing my eyes
i`m nothing but blind
no more rest
no more sleep
my soul is destroyed
from surface to deep
i`ve never wet the land
where i stand
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i`ve never dropped a tear
in a moment of fear
till the time my heart
was torn by a spear
till the time my guide
was no longer near
i cried and cried
my face never dried
the only time i cried
was when humanity died

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Emu Getachew 05 November 2009

the grief is intense and i am glad you used the female gender to express the demise of humanity. Not to say anything negative about the male gender but humanity bear, deliver and raise the human race from inception to birth...thanks for the invite...

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Carol Gall 05 November 2009

emotional poem very good

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Ency Bearis 05 November 2009

a very touching poem..a well expressed emotion and well versed...good poem...

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Nic Leisure 05 November 2009

i can't say it was the best but it was good to read i'll give you a two thums up on it keep up the good work...10

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Steven Aragon 05 November 2009

That was beautiful. You seduced me. At first, i thought it was a simple love poem until i reached the end. it was intense. It's so sad to say that it does seem at times like humanity is dying. The piece flowed very easy. pleasing ot the ears. great stuff.

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Prof. Dr. Sakti Chakravorty 08 November 2009

‘…the only time i cried // was when humanity died ‘ Very touchy and moving line. Ten++ dr.sakti

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Alex Andreev 06 November 2009

с п а с и б о з а п р е д л о ж е н и е п р о ч е с т ь т в о и р а б о т ы ! н а с а м о м д е л е о ч е н ь х о р о ш о , к р а с и в о и в р и ф м у . з н а е ш ь , к о г д а м ы Р о с с и я н е т в о р и м н е н а р у с с к о м я з ы к е а н а , к п р и м е р у , а н г л и й с к о м , н а с в с е г д а о т л и ч а е т р у с с к а я л ю б о в ь к р и ф м е , к м а г и и с л о в и в ы р а ж е н и й ... т е б е у д а л о с ь с о б л ю с т и з а к о н ы р и ф м ы , м н е о ч е н ь п о н р а в и л о с ь

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Ronell Warren Alman 05 November 2009

Strong emotion here! Good poem overall!

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Joseph Poewhit 05 November 2009

Words have a sad sensitivity

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Tristan Maverick 05 November 2009

the first stanza was, unfortunately, not my favorite. i do very much enjoy the ending of the second stanza though. overall, i enjoy this piece.

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