M. Asim Nehal

Gold Star - 166,172 Points (26th April / Nagpur)

Senryu - 17 (Concave Love) - Poem by M. Asim Nehal

Straight, as the crow flies
your love crashed into my heart
I am in deep sea.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: Senryu

Comments about Senryu - 17 (Concave Love) by M. Asim Nehal

  • Dorothy- A. Holmes (10/31/2015 11:59:00 AM)

    Another lovely Senryu
    Singing Still
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  • Bri Edwards (10/23/2015 4:38:00 PM)

    i 'loved' the first two lines, though i generally do not aim toward love poems if i can help it! BUT the third line threw me. what does it mean, i wonder. i haven't come up with an answer.

    bri :)
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  • Sofia Kioroglou (10/5/2015 1:44:00 PM)

    That's an amazing poem.Beautiful imagery dear! (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (9/25/2015 11:09:00 PM)

    A concave lens may be a convex on on the other side, view depends on the combined focal length of two sides. (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (9/13/2015 2:23:00 PM)

    Wonderful imagery. A beautiful poem having deep speculation. Thanks for sharing.....10 (Report) Reply

    Mohammed Asim Nehal (9/14/2015 1:58:00 PM)

    Thank u so so much....

  • Jaishree Nair (9/13/2015 4:15:00 AM)

    A haiku with such a deep meaning .wonderful .thanks (Report) Reply

    Mohammed Asim Nehal (9/14/2015 1:56:00 PM)

    Thanks a lot Ms. Jaishree.

  • Sanjukta Nag (9/13/2015 1:50:00 AM)

    An exclusive use of imagery.. i'm astounded.. and the last line made me speechless. this poem is beyond any rating. (Report) Reply

    Mohammed Asim Nehal (9/14/2015 1:55:00 PM)

    Thank u SN, Your comments are equally inspiring like your poems.

  • (9/13/2015 1:18:00 AM)

    Straight, as the crow flies ....Liked the simili
    Crashed into my heart.........Heart pierced with love arrow now replaced with another imagery...Heart with heart.
    I am in deep sea.........No where to go and no way to escape (No escape route) Wonderful haiku to read and analyse. Full marks Mr. Asim..
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    Mohammed Asim Nehal (9/14/2015 1:54:00 PM)

    Thanks much Mr. Evol

  • Rajnish Manga (9/13/2015 12:28:00 AM)

    I appreciate this poem for its wonderful imagery and idiom. Feeling of love is overwhelming. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

    Mohammed Asim Nehal (9/14/2015 1:53:00 PM)

    Thanks much Mr. Rajnish

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, September 13, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 13, 2016

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