M. Asim Nehal

Gold Star - 164,261 Points (26th April / Nagpur)

Senryu - 81 (A Burden To Carry) - Poem by M. Asim Nehal

basket of desires
filled with material things
burden to carry

Topic(s) of this poem: life, soul

Form: Senryu


Comments about Senryu - 81 (A Burden To Carry) by M. Asim Nehal

  • (11/15/2015 11:29:00 AM)


    First line itself is fantastic and followed by second and finally a burden to carry..great thinking man. (Report) Reply

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  • Souren Mondal (11/15/2015 7:01:00 AM)


    If only we could actually leave behind our GREED - desire for things we don't really need for our survival - we would have been far better.. Thank you Asim. A fine Senryu..10 points from me... (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (11/15/2015 5:06:00 AM)


    Great senryu Asim! A basket of desires will weigh heavy on our shoulders! (Report) Reply

  • (11/15/2015 1:44:00 AM)


    very true some carry them to their grave
    thanks Asim
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  • (11/14/2015 11:19:00 PM)


    Nicely projected reality. Desires for material things is greed and greed is insatiable and ultimately leaves the person unhappy and disturbed.10 points. (Report) Reply

  • Kelly Kurt (11/14/2015 11:16:00 PM)


    You have an eye to the real!
    Wonderful Senryu, Mohammed.
    Things are burdens. And You know it
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, November 14, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 13, 2016


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