M. Asim Nehal

Gold Star - 164,492 Points (26th April / Nagpur)

Senryu Series - 71 (To Make You Happy) - Poem by M. Asim Nehal

Your salty tears have
drowned me in deep sea of thoughts
mind suffocating.

Life is struggling hard
to make you happy again
bring back starry shine

Loneliness, comfort.
to bring again those lost dreams
with a smiley hope.

For your happiness
I'll turn earth- sky upside down
On painting canvas.

Topic(s) of this poem: love and friendship, happy

Form: Senryu


Comments about Senryu Series - 71 (To Make You Happy) by M. Asim Nehal

  • Edward Kofi Louis (5/15/2016 1:01:00 AM)


    Caregiving! Nice work. (Report) Reply

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/6/2015 12:46:00 PM)


    Life is struggling but salty tear fills in emotion in this for happiness one individual promises to turn the world is interesting with imagery. Nice sharing...10 (Report) Reply

  • Jaishree Nair (11/6/2015 3:15:00 AM)


    Love is turning the earth and sky upside down to bring happiness to the loved one.A nice drop. Thanks (Report) Reply

  • Sanjukta Nag (11/6/2015 1:15:00 AM)


    It's better not to say anything after those sublime lines. just clicking the 10 (Report) Reply

  • Paul Warren (11/6/2015 12:59:00 AM)


    I like the intensity of your feelings - nice one (Report) Reply

  • (11/6/2015 12:49:00 AM)


    there is a mighty lucky gal out there
    thanks Asim-10+++
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Poem Submitted: Friday, November 6, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 13, 2016


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