M. Asim Nehal

Gold Star - 166,528 Points (26th April / Nagpur)

Senryu Series - 77 Empty Nest - Poem by M. Asim Nehal

container of life
stitched with needle of love
seems abandoned.

and birds flew away,
after first successful flight,
tree expecting upright.

tree is very hopeful
with patience and faith on top
yet, the light is fading.

thought flew forever
yet the hope for seeing them one day
appeared like dream.

yet fate forced them
to take shelter for a night,
destined to meet.

Topic(s) of this poem: birds, life

Form: Senryu

Comments about Senryu Series - 77 Empty Nest by M. Asim Nehal

  • Edward Kofi Louis (6/1/2016 3:52:00 AM)

    The hope for seeing them one day! Nice piece of work. (Report) Reply

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  • Rajnish Manga (11/12/2015 9:35:00 AM)

    This is like a wholesome feast for the lovers of Haiku. This lovely series is based on promise and optimism starting with the first flight of a young bird. Thanks, Md. Asim ji. (Report) Reply

  • (11/12/2015 1:46:00 AM)

    brds coming back to their abandoned nest what a lovely read
    tanks Asi-10
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  • (11/12/2015 1:06:00 AM)

    Crafty haiku series by haiku Master Asim (Report) Reply

  • Kelly Kurt (11/11/2015 11:06:00 PM)

    I enjoy reading haiku in series. Thanks, Mohammed (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (11/11/2015 10:39:00 PM)

    Container of life
    Stitched with needle of love
    Seems abandoned.

    Beautiful haiku series strung together with similar beads of thought and turned into a beautiful necklace! A 10
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    Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/12/2015 11:18:00 AM)

    Thank u so much Madam Valsaji.

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/11/2015 10:23:00 PM)

    Yes you are very true in drafting. Tree is very hopeful
    With patience and faith on top....Amazing poem shared definitely. Wise sharing.10
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    Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/12/2015 11:18:00 AM)

    Thanks much Sir Kumarmaniji

  • (11/11/2015 10:16:00 PM)

    WONDERFUL CHAIN OF HAIKUS BOUND TOGETHER BY CONTINUITY OF THEME. Nice write. Enjoyed reading, . Thanks for sharing.10 points. (Report) Reply

    Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/12/2015 11:15:00 AM)

    Thank u so much Mr. Ratnakarji.

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 11, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 13, 2016

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