She Understood Me Poem by Hira Akhtar

She Understood Me

Rating: 5.0

The bananas in the bazar had too much rate

No said the shopkeeper
When i requested him to abate

Then i asked the price of date

Suddenly i remembered
I have left the open gate

With this i ran hurriedly
So that i may not get late

While running, I met on the way
With my class mate

She had in her hand
A tasty chocolate cake

My mouth filled with water
Like a lake

Before i would reach home i saw mom
With an anger
That was really great

I swiftly ran into the house
And closed the gate

After some time mother came
Started the door shake

I sighed and moved with fright
Towards the door,
Thinking that it was my mistake

The condition was opposite
Mother was having a beautiful smile
On her face

I requested mum I am sorry
Please forgive me this time
For God's sake

She smiled and said politely
Its Ok sweety look i have something
That you would love to take

There were bananas
Also a tasty chocolate cake

I kissed her
Staring at juncate

There is no doubt to say
Mothers are damn great

Because in every field of life, they aid

permanent love of mother and temporary anger I tried to show.......
Shahzia Batool 03 May 2013

Very beautiful poem, Hira! ! ! just take care of her! ! !

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Wahab Abdul 01 May 2013

i am happy that you are writing, keep can go

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Bright Morn 02 May 2013

Mother's lovely anger always have a factor of love, good write

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Akhtar Jawad 29 September 2014

I am reminded of a great poem Toys, in which a father is annoyed by his motherless son. He tells him some harsh words. The child goes to his bed room. After passage of some time the father thought of his son and went to his bed room. He found the child sleeping among a few toys. The father kissed his son and forgave him. The poet thinks he too remained busy in playing with toys in this world and hoped God will forgive him for his playing with the toys. Parents are the virtual image of God and they always forgive their children and bring joys of lovely gifts. An innocent and beautiful poem by you.

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Dinesan Madathil 19 January 2014

The theme of the poem is good. Structural quality and choice of diction will have to be improved. A good attempt on throwing light on Mother`s invincible love.

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Free Bird 18 September 2013

Real LOve............ A mother with her three hungry child found three apples. mother gave it to each of them saying she is not hungry.. Mother is a wonderful gift of God

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Bri Edwards 24 August 2013

Hira, i have copied a bunch of information about the word abate. i would not use abate the way you did, but, after reading the information below, i guess it is ok. i love the rhyming in this poem! a·bate ?'bat verb verb: abate; 3rd person present: abates; past tense: abated; past participle: abated; gerund or present participle: abating 1. (of something perceived as hostile, threatening, or negative) become less intense or widespread. the storm suddenly abated synonyms: subside, die down/away/out, lessen, ease (off) , let up, decrease, diminish, moderate, decline, fade, dwindle, recede, tail off, peter out, taper off, wane, ebb, weaken, come to an end; More archaicremit the storm had abated antonyms: intensify cause to become smaller or less intense. nothing abated his crusading zeal Law lessen, reduce, or remove (esp. a nuisance) . this action would not have been sufficient to abate the odor nuisance synonyms: decrease, lessen, diminish, reduce, moderate, ease, soothe, dampen, calm, tone down, allay, temper More nothing abated his crusading zeal antonyms: increase Origin More Middle English (in the legal sense ‘put a stop to (a nuisance) ’) : from Old French abatre ‘to fell, ’ from a- (from Latin ad ‘to, at’) + batre ‘to beat’ (from Latin battere, battuere ‘to beat’) . Translate abate to Use over time for: abate With my class mate............i am used to seeing the word classmate, but class mate, i think, is good in this sentence. and i am now reminded that poets are allowed to use poetic license, meaning they can wander from the truth or the norm at times to achieve the results they desire with their poems. I seighed and moved with fright Towards the door, hira, check the spelling in the first line here. did you mean seigh [which i never heard of but looked up and found it to be a (obsolete i believe) word meaning saw, as in the child seigh the ball flying toward him]? OR did you mean sigh? i think either towards or toward is ok in the second line. there are some small things i would write differently but if you wrote them the way i do, probably a lot of your readers would think you weren't you, but ME! so keep those things the way they are. heck, you can keep everything the way it is now and it will be a good poem. certainly it conveys the love you and your mother had/have for one another. yummy! cake [chocolate too! ] and bananas and juncate [i had to look up juncate]! ! ! this is close to being my favorite of the poems i have read that you have submitted. i'll put it in MyPoemList. thanks for sharing. bri

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Yasmin Khan 18 May 2013

It is wonderful. great and lovely expressing your deep love for mother and no doubt givivg voice to everyone's emotions...nice, keep it up!

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