Soldier Poem by Bryony Sheldon

Soldier

Rating: 4.8


The gun is loaded.
Warhorse thunders towards the front,
Straight towards the void.

My chest is burning.
The bayonets flash in the blackened sun,
Blinding our eyes.

The gun is loaded.
White knuckles are tight on the grip,
Yet I feel nothing.

In a foreign field.
We charge onwards to our fate
In a foreign grave.

The gun is loaded
And I rust some of my bullets
With stranger's blood.

Comrades fall.
Stiffened wounds begin to test our pride,
Coarse, raw, cold.

The gun is loaded.
It chuckles at the men I slaughter,
It laughs as they die.

I spend bullets,
Screaming at the sky as I charge on,
Deafened by shame.

The gun is loaded.
My victims fall tediously one by one,
I lose count.

He has no name.
I catch him in my cold sights,
He catches me, too.

The gun is loaded.
Our eyes meet for a mere split second,
And we know each other.

We hesitate.

I regain focus.
War is a game of survival, not compassion,
And I only have one bullet left.

I reach for the trigger-
BANG!
My gun is loaded.

Tuesday, March 26, 2019
Topic(s) of this poem: battle,dead,death,fight,hate,honor,panic,rushing,shooting,soldier
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I don't think I made it very clear,
They only have one bullet left, and yet their gun is still loaded at the end because they didn't shoot quick enough.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
C F 26 March 2019

The intensity of the poem, the action, the images is very convincing, very well written! 10+ I remember Rupert Brooke's poem: If I should die, think only this of me: That there’s some corner of a foreign field That is for ever England....

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Me Poet Yeps Poet 05 April 2019

just beautiful only RUPY could have composed it my be POET ME equally I remember Rupert Brooke's poem: If I should die, think only this of me: That there’s some corner of a foreign field That is for ever England..

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Jankovic Zoran 28 March 2019

A good text is when we read it and like watching a movie. It seems to me that this is a love movie without a happy ending. I guess that " opponent" deserves it. I'm not a judge, but I know what number 10 is.

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Me Poet Yeps Poet 27 March 2019

good soldierly where did you learn it Now as u r a poetess of class DO READ MOMS SMILES fast if you have thank you

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 27 March 2019

A very gripping write. So intense. In a couple of seconds I I was able to watch an action movie. Every stanza is beautifully crafted and well executed. Superb imagery.10+++

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 08 October 2020

Revisiting this wonderful poem that can evoke intense feelings. Great and vivid images. Very gripping.

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Chinedu Dike 19 December 2019

Well expressed thoughts and feelings. An insightful piece of poetry written with conviction. Thanks for sharing and do remain enriched.

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A B Faniki 23 September 2019

Niely done, a brilliant tercet with vivid images. Thanks for sharing such a heartfelt poem

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James Mclain 07 September 2019

Never explain dear, Let the reader draw their own conclusions. They will usually infer wrong..... L.O.L.

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Dr Antony Theodore 07 April 2019

In a foreign field. We charge onwards to our fate In a foreign grave.......You have succeded in getting deep into the mind of the soldier. thank u dear poetess. tony

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