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The Bird Watcher (Part 1)

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I plod through the leafy woods
The shadowy, coolly rain forest at the dale
Harkening the spellbinding tunes of trills
Watching the vividly coloured pretty fowls

Echoes of those feeble (But aloud) chirrups twinging me
Of those little birds I encaged in my early ages
Were all tremulous and dolorous sobs, but
Misapprehended unto chant sweet songs of rollicking

Encaging the birds is remorselessness
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Bob Blackwell 18 June 2009

You expressed sentiments I spoke of just this morning, we have no right to cage lovely birds for just our own enjoyment. I have a garden full of birds which give me pleasure and they are free to leave when they wish. I however do agree with Alison as to length of poem. Keep writing poems of conscience, that; s what poetry is for.

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Alison Cassidy 28 May 2009

Your subject matter is both beautiful and important. Caged birds are prisoners who have committed no crime. As to your poem. It begins well (like your use of the word 'plod' in the first line) but I think the poem is too long. If you leave out the last three stanzas your poem will make its point much more powerfully. Itemized lists of names may show your knowledge, but do little to enhance your poem. I'd end it on that excellent line: 'And dry out their invisible tears in the fresh breeze of the freedom' Remember, in poetry, less is more. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Edith Oram 20 May 2009

I like your vivid imagery and am delighted that you now appreciate birds@ freedom.

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Obinna Eruchie 19 May 2009

a watcher who once caged the birds, now prefers sighting the birds in freedom. it is a wonderful poem with good imagery.

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I wholeheartedly support your wisdom for freedom of birds. As another poet has said God made them to be free and fly. Maybe because humans can't fly they are jealous! ! Your imagery is very beautiful and your knowledge amazing. Glorious writing. 10 Karin Anderson

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Pampero Jadan 18 November 2009

i lived this poem amazing describing thank you for beautiful writing let's see more

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Rabi Anata 06 July 2009

once again great imagery, and lovely concept.: ]

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Shashendra Amalshan 02 July 2009

beautiful indeed sir.... great one to get away from the complex concrete world we are living! ! ! ! this is a nice read! ! with love shan

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Ivor Hogg 24 June 2009

A song bird in a cage sets all heaven a rage

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Indira Renganathan 21 June 2009

Soul-filling words...indeed a divine write

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