The Moment (Barack Hussain Obama’s Inauguration) Poem by sania harris

an awesome poem for your age. CP

From : Argenis Hernandez (Los Angeles United States; Male; 18) To : Nia Riz Date Time : 2/1/2009 8: 05: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00) Subject : On your Obama poem First off, I'd like to say that you have some serious talent as a poet. Your verses really attract readers with you rsuspense and sudden tone shifts. However, since we both are young, many of us adolescent poets struggle to find our own style. I don't think that there's anything wrong with the formal style that you write in. But I think that with all your talent, you should begin to experiment with more modern styles. The formal verse has been practiced since the first form of poetry was put in text (Homer's 'The Illiad') . To me, the formal verse just isn't the style that 'The Moment' should've been written in. Most of the poem seems like your were kind of forcing it to rhyme. While being able to rhyme is a beautiful gift, you should never force it to rhyme. I've learned this the hard way and you can easily tell from my own poems. But like my teacher(and hopefully future mentor) says, ' that's only one person's opinion. I'm just saying that it doesn't work for me. But in the end it's up to you to decide.' the moment just didn't work for me. Also, i'd like to let you know that I will continue to read you work when time permits. So keep doin with the do.

You did well in highlighting some of the positive things that were forever stamped in the history of these U.S. It was a moment of historic significance in a dramatic way and the millions of people who were there and witnessed it via T.V. attest to that. Now we long for the continuation of this moment and hope that there will be many more. It was symbolic and the actual transformation of all that it symbolizes must now be realized. It will take a lot of work and time to get everything right. Your effort was well done and nicely constructed and written.

yeah it was cool but i'm not all that sure that obama is goin to do what he say he goin to do but believing in sumone is another thing i believe in him yep but the flow of it was really great i liked it alot

Obama is much popular in us rather thn in US.. Bt personally i really lik obama 2... Yer poem had a gud flow very nicely write... Hop tht change is wit peace...8 4 u swty

Hy, Sania It is a great idea u have express.Sharing the great moments that has never lived before.Now the time has come that we all share this great moment of change, a great moment for a better tommorow, a great moment of joy.My hearts goes out with you. It is a great poem.well penned, written, arranged and peacefull, joyfully and a hope o better tommorow all America. Keep the feeling, the oneness and the trust and believe that there will be a better tommorow. U ARE A GREAT WRITER.I SALUTE U SANIA.

Everybody hope, Barack will be a new restart for United State and for the whole world. Well done for this great work!

it's no flukie dear but hard earned victory! good poem...

HI... You're very young & talented, i like yr poem. Tks for sharing

may Obama's moment flow and flourish that we may all bathe and swim in its tides and find new shores, new hopes and dream huge mountainous dreams. Please read Nia's comment carefully. You're young and we'll all read you as you grow and grow and flourish in Obama moments.