Watching Her Daddy Come Poem by sania harris
Watching Her Daddy Come
The cherry wind stroke her face
Shuffling her locks aside
With a beaming smile she sat awake
To watch her daddy come
Her scenic eyes were going scarlet
And often she closed them soft
But nothing stopped her blue eyes wide
To watch her daddy come
She fell tired every minute or two
And again she wakes to look
With a longing face and crimson eyes
To watch her daddy come
Today or tomorrow, he may come she knew
With loads of sweets and candy
To receive with hugs and sugary kisses
She waited for him alone
When time goes by, she will fall asleep
And wake up a bright new day
She will forget about her daddy to come
And will drowse in her games along the bay
When the lights go off and the smile fades off
She goes to her ancient window
With a longing face and crimson eyes
To watch her daddy come
February 9,2008
wow, i haven`t thought that a girl of ur age could write such poem it is great.
a good write..with good deliverance..great poem... Ency Bearis
This is a very, very good poem, Nia, and overall it is well written and expressed. In your 1st line of the 1st verse the word 'stroke' should be 'stroked' her face. The rest of this verse, as well as the 2nd and 3rd verses are excellent. At the beginning of the 4th verse, the use of 'Today or tomorrow' makes the line too long or 'unbalanced' as we say; try Anyday he may come, she knew... In the next verse,2nd line, doesn't And wakes up TO a bright new day sound better? The rest of the poem is fine. A very impressive write for one as young as you are. Carl.
keep writing girl. i see you somewhere, i mean, when all is done with down here, you could be the next yeats, or just sania great in your own right! how about that?
A nice poem with meaningful deliverance. Great write my friend. Keep up
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I would like to translate this poem
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excellent piece..your thoughts have a creative brilliance that shows anyone who cares to read carefully that you have wonderous promise and aptitude for poetry....never stop writing...as you grow older youll see these pieces and perhaps smile at, and understand what ive just told you.