sania harris

Watching Her Daddy Come

The cherry wind stroke her face
Shuffling her locks aside
With a beaming smile she sat awake
To watch her daddy come

Her scenic eyes were going scarlet
And often she closed them soft
But nothing stopped her blue eyes wide
To watch her daddy come

She fell tired every minute or two
And again she wakes to look
With a longing face and crimson eyes
To watch her daddy come

Today or tomorrow, he may come she knew
With loads of sweets and candy
To receive with hugs and sugary kisses
She waited for him alone

When time goes by, she will fall asleep
And wake up a bright new day
She will forget about her daddy to come
And will drowse in her games along the bay

When the lights go off and the smile fades off
She goes to her ancient window
With a longing face and crimson eyes
To watch her daddy come



February 9,2008

Poem Submitted: Tuesday, September 2, 2008
Poem Edited: Wednesday, April 6, 2011

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  • Rita Hawkins (12/26/2008 5:20:00 AM)

    just yet one more great poem, bravo.

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  • Kelvin Karani (12/14/2008 10:43:00 AM)

    keep writing girl. i see you somewhere, i mean, when all is done with down here, you could be the next yeats, or just sania great in your own right! how about that?

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  • Joseph Poewhit (12/1/2008 1:18:00 AM)

    Good Daddy's are important in a girls life

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  • Ravi SathasivamRavi Sathasivam (11/30/2008 10:33:00 PM)

    A nice poem with meaningful deliverance.
    Great write my friend. Keep up

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  • Madison Yeater (11/30/2008 7:02:00 PM)

    very nice. no words can describe the beauty of this poem.

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  • Dr.Wardha Jawdat (11/19/2008)

    excellent piece..your thoughts have a creative brilliance that shows anyone who cares to read carefully that you have wonderous promise and aptitude for poetry....never stop writing...as you grow older youll see these pieces and perhaps smile at, and understand what ive just told you.

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  • Blue Eyes (11/16/2008 4:48:00 PM)

    wow, i haven`t thought that a girl of ur age could write such poem it is great.

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  • Raja Basu (11/5/2008 2:16:00 AM)

    Sania, u r truely talented.

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (11/4/2008 10:43:00 PM)

    a good write..with good deliverance..great poem...

    Ency Bearis

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  • Carl Harris (11/4/2008 1:39:00 PM)

    This is a very, very good poem, Nia, and overall it is well written and expressed. In your 1st line of the 1st verse the word 'stroke' should be 'stroked' her face. The rest of this verse, as well as the 2nd and 3rd verses are excellent. At the beginning of the 4th verse, the use of 'Today or tomorrow' makes the line too long or 'unbalanced' as we say; try Anyday he may come, she knew... In the next verse,2nd line, doesn't And wakes up TO a bright new day sound better? The rest of the poem is fine. A very impressive write for one as young as you are. Carl.

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  • Amy (11/4/2008 12:20:00 PM)

    this is really good,
    a bit like one of my poems, where were you
    for a 14 year old, you are talented
    one line was a tiny bit longer to read- if that makes sense, but apart from that, you are great with writing
    a promising poet :)
    10 for effort and opinion :)

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  • Paolo Giuseppe MazzarelloPaolo Giuseppe Mazzarello (11/4/2008 11:58:00 AM)

    This is an intimate family set, described with delicacy, innocence and feeling.

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  • PERSIAN NIGHTINGALEPERSIAN NIGHTINGALE (11/4/2008 11:45:00 AM)

    well done, beautiful thanks for sharing

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  • Hana KHana K (10/9/2008 6:27:00 AM)

    i like this one
    it's sad but good,
    just like your other poems
    they're so beautiful

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  • Some Poems (10/8/2008 6:45:00 AM)

    I really liked it but would have liked to see all of the stanzas finshed with the line 'to watch her daddy come' i thought that line was used well through out the poem. but it still worked great.9

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  • Talia Torres (10/7/2008 7:27:00 PM)

    beautiful....10 all the wayy

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  • Enoch JohnEnoch John (10/6/2008 3:17:00 PM)

    This piece clearly outlines the bond between father and daughter.Well done.

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  • Anthony Dover (10/6/2008 9:06:00 AM)

    repetion invites a rhythm of its own and carries along the beautifu metaphors-'cherry wind'Anthony

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  • Ben Gieske (10/1/2008 6:44:00 PM)

    A well-written poem. It conveys a feeling of closeness to a father and a longing to feel his presence. The longing builds with intensity. The event of her forgetting about him is a bit unexpected, but you reassure us that she hasn’t really done that - at least not intentionally. You use the word, “forget” but that doesn’t seem to be the case. It’s more like her falling under a spell - “fall asleep” and “drowse in her games”. But there is no permanent cure as is indicated in your last stanza.

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  • Roger Naya (9/30/2008 10:17:00 PM)

    Very deep and well written, good job

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