saadat tahir

Gold Star - 5,713 Points (21011965 / Islamabad-Pakistan)

The Well Worn Ring … 0108-2k12 - Poem by saadat tahir

(Plight of an abandoned elderly social worker)

Drag a well worn ring apart,
and ring the middle finger,
with a woeful lonely part.
Then crashing let it linger;

slide by cherry's dull gleam,
in the rutted trodden path.
On waves that lost steam,
rest hand on craggy swath.

Mingle bliss in sullen gloom.
Full fingered hand that once,
dealt many a pleasant groom,
drab now lies a forlorn dunce.

Pale and silent sentinel lamp,
on tatty sheets that nasty reek,
shows mortal's montage stamp,
by casting a pitted puffy cheek.

Lone and forlorn attic act,
gone youth's silk and soft.
Plays a miserable tragic fact.
Scarce carps the creaky loft.

No steps ascend a dreary door,
pudgy lids, lug a sickly moan.
No bristle nicks a strewn floor.
A silent cry stifles in a groan.

Toying the pendant's worn chain,
that clings to her swoony throb.
Sills and eyes trickle quiet rain,
as Grim, awaits a shivering blob.


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saadat tahir
01 Aug,2k12
Islamabad.


Poet's Notes about The Poem

prompted by an old local drama and an attached commentary.

Comments about The Well Worn Ring … 0108-2k12 by saadat tahir

  • Alexandria AngelAlexandria Angel (8/29/2012 12:23:00 PM)

    i love the poen it has alot of neaning and it made me start to cry... (Report)Reply

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  • Karen Sinclair (8/27/2012 1:05:00 PM)

    Saadat this is just so thought provoking and as beautiful as a cut from a rose thorn.... breathtaking just so sad and lovely.... a wow read indeed (Report)Reply

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  • Elena SanduElena Sandu (8/24/2012 3:25:00 AM)

    Oh this poem is so sad that tears blurred my eyes. Thank you for share,10. (Report)Reply

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  • Valerie DohrenValerie Dohren (8/9/2012 5:09:00 PM)

    Brilliantly written, very imaginative and descriptive. (Report)Reply

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  • Simon Odhiambo (8/9/2012 6:53:00 AM)

    Mind jogging and serious poem. very nicely done. keep it going. (Report)Reply

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  • Captain CurCaptain Cur (8/8/2012 7:20:00 PM)

    Very provoking. You used a minimum of words but addressed
    a insurmountable mountain of loneliness, lost youth and rejection.
    Powerful and well written.
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, August 1, 2012



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