These Eyes Poem by Seamus O' Brian

These Eyes

Rating: 4.8


these eyes, the spyglass of tomorrow's horizons
gazing today, even now, bronze-bound discs of living glass,
glazed and rimmed in the hazing blast of yesterday's furnace
to see, not merely with eyes of insentient flesh, but with sight
kilned in every crucible stumble of a pilgrim's broken journey,
shaped and formed by the guilt of a thousand more than countless
failures, tempered by the brutal pain of climbing beyond
hopelessness and helplessness, vision honed in the staggering
through the darkness of night and soul where a single candle
would be a home, would be a lover, would be salvation.

To see with eyes unclouded by the doubt of those
whose envy strands the ligatures that would bind
my future to my past. No, through the murky shadows
of today, I force these eyes to look upon, to discern
that coruscating vision of tomorrow, forging triumph instead
from every painful stride of yesterday.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Glen Kappy 12 October 2017

so, neal, i was just checking to see your response, and i reread your poem, and this is another i have to say, dang! this is strong stuff. this line most got me this time— kilned in every crucible stumble of a pilgrim's broken journey... this is dense, with a great use of kiln as a verb, of alliteration, and so characteristically you. and dense as it is, it doesn't get bogged down—there's still strong forward movement. and if coruscating was already part of that huge bundle that is your vocabulary, i'm impressed. —i just looked it up for the second time. on developing or evolving vision, you may find my poem aging as ascent interesting if you haven't already read it. i look forward to hearing from you during this respite. glen

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Kumarmani Mahakul 11 August 2017

Tomorrow's horizons are amazing really that spyglass of eyes sees. Bronze-bound discs of living glass gazes upon life. In darkness of life soul needs candle to see path with little light. To overcome from painful way life needs wisdom of light of God. An amazing poem is shared is well crafted...10

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Seamus O Brian 12 August 2017

Thank you, good friend, for your kind words. Small acts of kindness enrich the recipient, and elevate the giver. Be blessed, my friend.

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Susan Williams 15 August 2017

If I were asked to point out my favorite lines in this poem then I would have to simply copy and paste the entire monumental poem to my wall. If I were threatened to be shot if I didn't pick out a favorite line or two, I would have to pick- - - - - - - - - to see, not merely with eyes of insentient flesh, but with sight kilned in every crucible stumble of a pilgrim's broken journey, shaped and formed by the guilt of a thousand more than countless failures, tempered by the brutal pain of climbing beyond hopelessness and helplessness, vision honed in the staggering through the darkness of night and soul where a single candle would be a home, would be a lover, would be salvation.- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - You are a Mount Everest of a poet- -the rest of us can only dream of reaching such heights. 10++++++++++++++ and onto my Fav list

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Seamus O Brian 12 October 2017

Thank you, dear Susan, and apologies for my delayed response. Much tumult in these days which has taken me away from here. So good to find familiar friends upon my return. Be blessed, my friend.

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Wonderful writing Seamus 10 out of 10 THANK YOU FOR SHARING MARIO ODEKERKEN

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Khirod Dalpati 16 October 2017

To see with eyes unclouded by the doubt of those whose envy strands the ligatures that would bind my future to my past. No, through the murky shadows of today, I force these eyes to look upon, to discern that coruscating vision of tomorrow, forging triumph instead from every painful stride of yesterday. Beautifully Expressed.... Congratulations for the poem of the day

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Jeanette Telusma 16 October 2017

- -To see with eyes unclouded by the doubt of those whose envy strands the ligatures that would bind my future to my past.- - Wow.... a wonderful poem with great truth, It takes the reader into a state of meditation. The lines quoted here should be an eye opener for many. Congratulations......

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Harley White 16 October 2017

Ah, Seamus O'Brian, you have a poet's heart indeed! Wonderfully expressed, with power and passion...

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Seamus O Brian 16 October 2017

My dear colleagues, As we stumble together, somehow bound together from every corner of this world, following the canyons of our various lives, sometimes seeing the path plainly illuminated before us, sometimes struggling blindly, feeling our way with fingertips in the darkness, each of us separate and distinctly unique, but bound together in one heart. All with such a varied perspective of the universe, and beautifully individual in our expression of what we have found along the way, what we have seen, what we have felt. Beauty and pain, passion and loneliness, power and fear, all of the fullness of the experience of living, poured out in our words and painted in our poetry. All so different, and yet all so powerfully united in our collaboration of art. I am humbled, and yet so greatly privileged to collaborate with you, to share this journey with you. Thank you all for making my world more beautiful.

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