Akhtar Jawad

Gold Star - 189,455 Points (8-2-1945 / Gorakhpur)

Who First Time Kissed - Poem by Akhtar Jawad

Neither the dense clouds, nor the winds exciting,
You entered in her as a beauty inviting.
It were you who rained on the soil too dry
Here is a paradise; hell may be at the sky,
It were you who danced as the showers
It were you who sprung into flowers,
Neither birds nor beasts, nor a human, or a Jinn,
It's none else, wasn't me, who committed this sin,
The weather was pleasant, and long were your arms,
Drunk in the wine of your ecstatic charms
It wasn't a girl, wet and visible in a suit of lawn
Having dreamed a kiss in her teens she came as a dawn
It wasn't a boy in the rains; she was difficult to be missed,
It wasn't me, it were you, who first time kissed!
And if the proceeding dusk lead to a moonlit night
Don't hide your naughty face, it's too much bright.

Topic(s) of this poem: nature


Poet's Notes about The Poem

Lawn is a semitransparent cotton cloth that women wear in the summer.

Comments about Who First Time Kissed by Akhtar Jawad

  • Bhargabi Dei Mahakul (5/4/2018 11:31:00 PM)

    Ecstatic charm has wonderfully motivated natural breath and beauty of hope and life. Moonlight has created a bright beam of face of perception. Pleasant weather has captured the petals of flowers. Such wonderful poem definitely deserves to be the poem of the day. A powerful imagery is witnessed in this poem. Always you have excellent idea in poetry composition....10 (Report)Reply

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  • Hassan Hayati (5/4/2018 10:56:00 PM)

    Many congratulations for such a beautiful piece of writing, which really deserves the POD title, (Report)Reply

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  • Carl Roussell (5/4/2018 9:18:00 PM)

    This is why we write; to put in words a feeling that may resonate with the reader. Akhtar, you are gifted! (Report)Reply

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  • Bharati Nayak (5/4/2018 8:51:00 PM)

    It is not the girl or the boy, but nature that gives us the first feeling of love by making us aware to the beauty all around.Let me quote a few lines from this wonderful poem- - - -
    It were you who danced as the showers
    It were you who sprung into flowers,
    Neither birds nor beasts, nor a human, or a Jinn,
    It's none else, wasn't me, who committed this sin,
    - -Congratulations for Poem of the Day.
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  • Rose Marie Juan-austin (5/4/2018 5:04:00 PM)

    Here to revisit this wonderful poem that has been woven with beautiful words and lovely thoughts.
    Congratulations, Akhtar for Poem of the Day. Another laurel for your golden pen.
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  • Muzahidul Reza (5/4/2018 11:44:00 AM)

    Interesting poem, congrats and thanks for sharing the poem with us (Report)Reply

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  • Savita Tyagi (5/4/2018 10:26:00 AM)

    Here is a paradise he’ll may be at sky. Spring is what makes earth look as a lovely bride. Congratulations for a beautiful poem for member poem place. (Report)Reply

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  • Kelly Kurt (5/4/2018 9:09:00 AM)

    In spring, a young man's heart turns to love. (Report)Reply

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  • (5/4/2018 7:49:00 AM)

    Very sensuous poem about love and seduction.. (Report)Reply

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  • Pallab Chaudhury (5/4/2018 7:19:00 AM)

    Very nicely written. Congrats for the poem being selected as the POD.
    With best wishes.
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  • Rajnish Manga (5/4/2018 6:59:00 AM)

    Lovely poem. Expressions so pleasing to the heart and soul. The muse of good times distributing her bounties to the nature around and a few selected goodies to the blessed one. Thanks & Congrats, Akhtar Sahab.
    It were you who rained on the soil too dry
    Here is a paradise; may be at the sky,
    It were you who danced as the showers
    It were you who sprung into flowers,
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  • (5/4/2018 6:50:00 AM)

    Wonderful personification, , , Akhtar Saab. Congrats! (Report)Reply

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  • Dr Dillip K Swain (5/4/2018 4:48:00 AM)

    Many congratulations for this amazing poem being selected as POD! (Report)Reply

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  • (5/4/2018 4:44:00 AM)

    Congratulations Akhtar for Poem of the Day. I'm thinking of spring throughout your lovely write. (Report)Reply

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  • (5/4/2018 4:12:00 AM)

    Very well crafted Akhtarji......Superb indeed.........deserving 10+++++++ (Report)Reply

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  • (5/4/2018 3:31:00 AM)

    a poem of naturalistic confessions perfectly sealed with a kiss? ................beautifully written Akhtar (Report)Reply

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  • (5/4/2018 3:04:00 AM)

    Very beautiful poem sir
    Loved it
    It brought a smile on my face....
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  • Robert Murray Smith (5/4/2018 2:50:00 AM)

    An excellent write. Second POD. You are certainly in favour. Good for you dear poet. (Report)Reply

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  • Nudershada Cabanes (5/4/2018 1:40:00 AM)

    Beautifully crafted poem. Congrats on your POD. (Report)Reply

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  • Drtony Brahmin (5/4/2018 12:44:00 AM)

    CONGRATULATIONS! dear and revered Poet for the selection of POD.
    You deserve it soo well. rained on the soil, you who danced as the showers, you who sprung into flowers,
    simply beautiful dear Aktar.. tony
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, April 18, 2018

Poem Edited: Friday, May 4, 2018


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