A Fair Trade? Poem by Callie Carroll

A Fair Trade?

Rating: 4.9

bland white bread
for the round tang of basil

eau de artifice
with the scent of honest sweat

ringtones, mine and not mine,
for the reedy whirr of bee wings

the opulence of silk
with the grit of soil under nails

Become lost
in a pale, lime wing

against purple petunia.

Tuesday, July 22, 2008
Topic(s) of this poem: nature
Written after a day in the yard
Ivan Donn Carswell 10 August 2008

I'm with Frank - and enjoyed the neatly wrapped images you unfolded. Rgds, Ivan

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Ashraful Musaddeq 11 September 2008

A beautiful composition with a nice ending: 'open my mind - and become lost in a pale lime wing against purple petunia.'.

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Lee Crowell 28 September 2008

very nice and original, much different from your other work

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Scarlett Treat 28 October 2008

I like the idea here, of freely trading the finer things of life (silk) and the too busy things of life (that ringing phone...) for the chance to get down and dig and plant in the soil, getting dirt under your fingernails! Great writing!

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Kevin Greene 08 December 2008

i as a nature lover can identify with this very good

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Dr.subhendu Kar 11 March 2010

barter ringtones, mine and not mine, for the reedy whirr of bee wings.............ingenious write yet of unique genre,10++, thanks for sharing

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Alex Nodopaka 26 October 2009

I appreciate antihistamine poetry... chuckle

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Patrick A. Martin 08 October 2009

Once again I find myself in a garden and I must say this is a beautiful garden of ideas.10

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Sonya Florentino 27 September 2009

brilliant...and the last stanza tells me you get more than you bargain for!

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Bill Thomas 17 January 2009

Illustrates perfectly what I love about your poems, that every word is precisely chosen, and the whole intelligently crafted. You weave a feeling of colour that makes the poem hang in the mind for a good while.

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