The stars are cool
They smile like you
The flowers steal my gaze
Like you each time at the terrace
The trees are beautiful
Just like you
The smiles of you
Make a wish come true
Each time I sing all things
bright and beautiful
I remember you're beyond
a thing that's beautiful
You're beyond beautiful
You're undefineable
You're just a wish come true
I like your poem. It has nice meter, nice rhyme and a nice spirit. However " Just like the way you do" doesn't really go with trees being beautiful. Perhaps consider: The trees are beautiful Just like you OR The trees are beautiful And so are you
Brilliant articulation. It transforms love into a thing of the other world. This is an outstanding piece of poetry. Thanks a lot.
FIZ, I just scrolled down your list of titles and would like to return to read more. Are any you esp. would like me to read and comment on? bri :)
I don't know why it's spelled this way, with just two " e" s, while I think it is pronounced like it has 3! undefinable [ˌəndəˈfīnəb(ə) l] DEFINITION adjective form of undefined ................... Anyway it is very clear the speaker REALLY LIKES the object (man or woman) spoken of. Nice. bri ;)
Falana Idowu Zion, May your wish come True. The Poem The Smile, The Gaze, The, Beauty, The Smile, Bright and Beautiful, Beyond Beautiful, Undeniable, " You're just a wish come true" The poet's ardent longing for the wish is well evident and clearly portrayed. Keep on writing.
Simple and beautiful poem. Loved its flow. Thanks for sharing.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A well written composition. Simply marvelous...10++